A cry for help

this was one of the first poems I ever wrote, it isnt very good but I havent tweeked it for what it symbolizes, and the memory of writing this is very strong and I dont want to throw that away.

I was the one to leave you first

now I'm the one to leave yu last

I wish we could have had a better past

it went by so fast

no happy time ever lasted

 

if you would ask

how much I miss you

I would say

as much as how long it was since

THE DAy I had my first laugh

The Day I had my first breath

The Day I was born

 

but today I don't know why

today I dont know how

Today I'm so confused

on the way you make me feel

I am sad and wishin we could start over

then im mad and wishin i could be done

with you

 

I know I was the one to leave you first

I know I'm the one who will leave you last

if I dont act fast

and let the past consume me

and let the present infume me

oh I can't see

how this cant be both

you and me

we dont have to take an oath

we just need to act as one

to fix this

fix this

Author's Note

please ignore the poor word choice and other faults and focus on what it means and the statements its making, because again this is one of my very first poems.

Reviews

[Kenaz]

Good poem, just needs a few revisions as you mentioned. This poem could almost be a song too if it were a few lines longer. Nice job for one of your first poems