A Vision of Beauty

a love poem written in an envelope form

photograph ~ skiwasser65

 

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Oh beautiful you, I’m yours and you're mine

You sing in my soul the warmest refrain

and send my heartbeat much like drops of rain

dancing to your song again and again

and this tenderness, I find divine

 

And that is why love, I feel we are one

You’ve captured me now and I long to stay

mesmerized by you as the disarray

of storms of passion so deep within play

in loves harmony, untamed and undone

 

Oh beautiful you, what am I to do?

You’re only a dream, if the truth be told

and when I awake and raindrops turn cold

I wish for the night to stay and to hold

these visions so warm of beautiful you

~~~

Author's Note

The envelope form is metered poetry with stanzas of 5 lines and a rhyme pattern of abbba

Reviews

[Jack...]

Julie, I swera, your world must be filled with beautiful love, for your offerings always shower us with this wonderful affection. I love the format of this piece, though I was so lost in your words that I could not really see past the loveliness to find the rhyme scheme until I read your author's note. Once I went back and read it again, it became even more beautiful. Very nicely done.

[MsJewel]

Jack, Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful day! :) Julie

[LL]

Nicely written piece Julie, I enjoyed reading it :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Levi :) Julie

[Joyce S. Greene]

Nicely executed form poetry, Julie. Another lovely poem, despite the fact that the speaker is in love with a dream, a very lonely pursuit.

[MsJewel]

Ah yes...but where would we be without dreams??? Thanks for your lovely comment Joyce. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful evening :) Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Julie... As the night unfolds...
heart beats much like drops of rain...
dance to your song...
"the disarray of storms of passion
so deep within play in loves harmony,
untamed and undone". Yur visions are
tangled with emotions which stir
the soul that longs for heavens quest.
Truly stunning like a river searching for
the open arms of the sea. Pat

[MsJewel]

(((((Pat)))) It's wonderful to see you. Thank you for the lovely comment. I've missed reading your gorgeous poetry! Hugs, Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Julie... the flow of your poetry
never ceases to make me feel mellow
and romantic. It is almost seven thirty pm
Here in Virginia...and the clouds are
darkest blue with streaks of silver light...
very poetic with awesome feelings of
fall and winter...time for lovers to
spark fires of desire. Truly dear friend...
Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

form not withstanding...(which is good, but i pay more attention to what's within)

and wow..."harmony, untamed undone"

still much more to come...
"i wish for the night to stay"

i want to hold you forever, tightly...never let go.

beautifully written love poem.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment Jacob! :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

There are two things about your writing that I really love...the mood, which seems to be upbeat and/or optimistic most of the time, and your natural knack for rhyme, which makes this form a perfect arena for that knack...great work as usual my friend :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment. I'm so glad you enjoy my scribbles! :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Julie :)

[Rosaria_V]

Awwwwwww I love this!!! I can't get over how talented you are girl!!

[MsJewel]

You are so sweet Rosaria. Thank you! :) Julie

[Rosaria_V]

Just being honest xoxo

[Keith]

Bravo for taking on a challenging new form. A delightful poems with your usual soft flowing tones.

[MsJewel]

I love learning new forms, but my favorite is still simple rhyme. Thanks so much for your great comment. :) Juie

[Lydia Shutter]

Dreamy and magical, your words drew me into the poem. The form is one that flows beautifully if the rhyming is written correctly....and yours absolutely is. The meter is right on target! This poem is lyrical. lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you Lydi. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful day! :) Julie

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I like the rhyme scheme, Julie! It's rare to see this ABBBA. Anyway, I think you spelled "you're" wrong? Unless it's intentional...

[MsJewel]

You are right - I sure did!! Thanks for catching that - I'm usually carefull...
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! :) Julie