Drifting....

~ the perfect winter afternoon on a Southern California beach...80 degrees and drifting.... ~

         

            art ~ Janet Hill

 

 

Once upon a balmy breeze

 I drift…

           poetry flowing from my heart

 

As graceful

as the rhythm of simple rhymes

swimming in an ocean of sapphire kissed daydreams

with seagulls singing backup

in perfect harmony

 

As warm

as the fantasy

built around a sandcastle of romance

now fragile in this balmy breeze

 

Yet still as hopeful

as the flower tucked behind my ear,

reminiscent of spring,

listening carefully for whispers of happily ever after

 

As once upon a balmy breeze…

                                    I drift

 

Reviews

[dan]

Julie, Now I REALLY feel cold. Brrrr.....! It's always heartening to read your consistently beautiful poetry. I remember the southern California climate, the lazy breeze blowing the palms on trees until they sway joyfully. A glass of iced tea in my hand (with an umbrella in it) (the tea, that is...not my hand). I wish you would release your poetry on CD so I can listen in my car while stuck in traffic...these kind of poems could melt the aggravation away with ease. Thank you, Julie. (It was either this or swear at you for rubbing my nose in it). take care...dan

[MsJewel]

I'll send you some California sunshine my sweet friend. Hugs, Julie

[rudelizard]

Simply amazing Julie!! Beautifully written... it just warms my soul and has me dreaming of watching the sun set as I dig my toes in the sand of my favorite beach in Cali.

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you :) Julie

[Roshan Nair]

I found this piece extremely peaceful and breezy. Seemed so scenic and vivid.. yet subtly worded. great work julie :) cheers

[MsJewel]

Cheers Roshan! :) Julie

[Ruth]

Your poetry is so delicate in the most wonderful manner...like tiptoeing through fields of enlightenment xo

[MsJewel]

Thank you for the generous compliment Poppy :) Julie

[Saddam]

As warm
as the fantasy
built around a sandcastle of romance.

As warm as this poetry and the Night, here. So beautiful.
Love the write.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This poem actually melts my heart but also breaks it a little… the is some sadness behind the romance in this poem. Lovely work.

[MsJewel]

thank you sweet cowboy...:) Julie

[SmittyJas]

I feel the warmths in the balmy breeze very pleasing to the senses Been out west but never to California A bunch of romantic dreamers live there Ah.

[MsJewel]

california is a little dreamy....thanks for your lovely comment Jim :) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful breeze of words and feelings, very well done, Julie. :) Rudi

[MsJewel]

thank you for your kind words Rudi :) Julie

[Mari K]

I like the dreamy quality of this piece. I can feel the space you paint yourself in. Nice work!

[MsJewel]

thank you Mari! :) Julie

[Elisa]

"...swimming in an ocean of sapphire-kissed daydreams" My favorite line! Excellent job as usual with the imagery. Your voice is so graceful, and this poem really showcases that. I haven't ever pointed out syntax on here, but there's a first time for everything! The lack of end punctuation and the use of ellipses really reflects that drifting feeling already established by the imagery. Usually, syntax is not something a poet thinks about, unless they are very perceptive and skilled, like you! Loved loved loved this poem!

[MsJewel]

You are very kind Elisa. Thank you for the wonderful review and the very sweet compliment. :) Julie

[R Smith]

I'm drifting with you Julie on the wings of this superb dream you have written, W/Cs first and foremost romantic poet, beautiful :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweet Richard. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie