I Write...

~ a heartprint ~

 

 

 

Heaven can wait

yet it didn’t

 

with pen in hand

and poems, prayers and promises

in my heart

 

I write

 

for the memory of his ocean eyes

midnight blue in peaceful tides

 

for his kiss

as warm as a sunbeam brushing

my lips with golden  kissed

daisy smiles

 

his breath as soft as the breeze

tickling my cheek

 

I write

 

A daisy a day

for the tides in midnight blue

and the beauty of his touch

for the serenity of my soul

and the one who couldn’t wait

 

I write

Reviews

[dan]

Julie, A very intriguing presentation, it allows you to set the table with earlier lines and culminate with the summation in the last stanza, all of it interspersed with 'I write' to punctuate your thoughts. This is really impressive, Julie; it would have been very good had you laid it out differently, but the way you do so allows some thoughts to seem as if they are separate without interrupting the overall flow. This is a very impressive piece, Julie, well written and well received. take care...dan

[MsJewel]

Thank so much Dan. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

A very good poem with a touch of sadness in it, but woven into your romantic words they become melancholic, nostalgic feelings for lost times, for heaven that couldn't wait. Loved all of it, Julie. :)

Rudi

[Mai L Nissen]

This is a beautiful poem, very melancholic and haunting. Your descriptions are as always eloquent with evocative imagery - "for the memory of his ocean eyes/ midnight blue in peaceful tides".
After the enchantment of beautiful descriptions in the stanzas, the repetition of "I write" gives the reader a
chance to pause, come back down to earth and feel the loss (for me at least).

It must have been difficult for you to write, but I am glad that you shared it.
Mai

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very romantic write about writing about a loved on...and how his love makes your tides roll in with passionate wonder.

[Healing Star]

We can capture and hold a Heavenly moment, a time spent with someone, in a good write.
You can be right back there in that dream when you come back to it and read and experience it again.
We Write! Beautiful, I liked the line "For the memory of his ocean Eyes"
Eyes that's what captures me, that and the smile. Sweet write Love.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely review. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[andrew mitchell]

For the memory of his ocean eyes .....lovely words. a nice read as calm as the girl in the ocean. p.s I'm still in love with that woman by Vidan

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words. I love Vidan's art as well. :) Julie

[Valentine]

This seems to have been written for me. Ocean blue eyes, golden kisses, his breath [and mustache] tickling my cheek, But his soft touch left...it is all a beautiful memory. Nice one Sweetie. Valentine

[MsJewel]

Thank you Kathie :) Julie

[Dara]

There is a sadness behind this poem that also portrays a great love that is now lost. "the beauty of his touch for the serenity of my soul and the one who couldn't wait, I write" Hauntingly beautiful in every way. Keep writing!

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[wordman]

a write of serenity,a loss but yet not that far away

[MsJewel]

still in memory Ron :) Julie

[Trace]

Your inspiration for writing has always, and I am sure will always be LOVE.

PAST, PRESENT, or FUTURE,,, or the deepest desire for what seems to be illusive,

And there is nobody does it better.

Simply beautiful.

Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you Trace :) Julie

[Ana B.]

beautiful and electrikal. Absolutely gorgeous writing my dear :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Ana :) Julie