Thorns and Briers

~ a collaboration with my favorite poet Trace ~

                             

 

 

 

When the sun sifts through the trees

and the clouds float gray above

shadows in the whispering leaves

seem to cry teardrops of love

 

As they fall in disarray

cold upon the mossy stone

time turns and looks away

as a heart beats all alone

 

Footsteps wander tender shores

 ‘pon a breeze of memories

the wind rises and it roars

with echoes of what could be

               

But within a rose you hide

among thorns and briers pain

petals wilt, flowers cried

to endure the haunting rain

 

Like a ghost that glimmers on

binding you to shadows mist

blurred are visions, never gone

and in dreams, I feel your kiss...

 

     

                              

           

 

Let me be your guiding star

opening your silent eyes

with a soft light from afar

to awaken love’s fireflies

 

On delicate fiery wings

through the darkness write my name

and with joy to you I’ll bring

my heart as a loyal flame

 

Never ending for all time

never pause by storm or breeze 

let your love be found in mine

when the sun sifts through the trees

 

 

Author's Note

poetry ~ MsJewel and Trace
art ~ Lauri Blank

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Really wonderful lines:
"o endure the haunting rain

Like a ghost that glimmers on
binding you to shadows mist
blurred are visions, never gone
and in dreams, I feel your kiss...”

This is a terrific collaboration. A budding love creating that healing space we all need sometimes to recover from loneliness.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

You’re very welcome

[Brian]

"But within a rose you hide
among thorns and briers pain
petals wilt, flowers cried
to endure the haunting rain"

My favorite part! Great job you guys!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you give hope at the end to the sadness that saturates the lines of this well written piece.

j.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Jacob :) Julie

[Valentine]

One of your best, one for my favorites list. You 2 write well together. Valentine

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment. I know Trace will appreciate it as well :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

Heavy sigh! The two of you write the most beautiful collaborative poetry! So much more than a poem....it feels like the screenplay of a great romantic movie! Bravo, you two! Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you Lydi. Your comments mean the world to me and I know Trace feels the same way. :) Julie

[ANTO]

I really like the use of the same opening and closing line - it made me feel as though I had read a beautiful classic romance novel. Great title and the imagery - the rose silently, diligently endowing beauty and grace among the briers is one that will stay with me. Great collaboration. Seamless. Well done Trace and Julie.

[AaronFreitas]

Beautiful poem my friend! Always a pleasure to read your beautiful words!

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Ana B.]

oh my oh my, this is gorgeous guys....a priceless gem :) Exquisite write.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Ana :) Julie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The style has the feel of antiquity of the eras of romantic poetry. I enjoyed most of the stanzas but my favourite:

But within a rose you hide
among thorns and briers pain
petals wilt, flowers cried
to endure the haunting rain

I did get a little confused as for the first few stanzas it read like a mournful poem about lost love but had progressed by the ending to a pure love poem?

[MsJewel]

Thank you John. We were going for a classic feel. The poem is a bit mournful, losing someone you love who is lost and helping them find their way back...Eternal love, forever. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it and I know Trace will be as well. :) Julie

[Jamestown]

My gosh you two, this is yet another piece that you fused into a gem
no doubt! This has so many wonderful aspects of poetry, beautiful, sensual,
simple piece that rains a soft drizzle or awesomeness, gorgeous picture as well,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your generous words James :) Julie

[613]

I enjoyed the pictures you chose. It added a sense of romanticism to the poem; which, by the way, was written very well.

- Brittney

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Brittney. Lauri Blank is one of my favorite artists. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the poem and presentation. :) Julie

[613]

You're welcome! (: