The Haunted One

~ a bittersweet sonnet ~

 art ~ karol bak

 

~~~

When night gives pause to a pale moon above

where beauty found me once, my heart, your love

still warms this tender place where I’ve become

a prisoner to the night, the haunted one

 

Catching whispers of moonlit memories

of words that lovers say, now reveries

to dress my pillow, silly as it seems

with visions of you love, and in these dreams…

 

You kiss my lips and brush the falling tears

in which I drown and yet I breathe, the years

cannot erase the ache, although divine

are the night skies above when moonlight shines

 

You may keep a piece of this heart that grieves

and I will keep the night, the memories

~~~

 

 

Reviews

[Trace]

To understand the depth of the emotions that you spill in this piece
One has to know the heart of the poet that lost her true love.

I know.... and I understand.....
And I am amazed at the beauty you find in the memories of that love
And how is fills the pallet with words that you paint your masterpieces of poetry.

I am so glad you share that with your friends.

HUGGS. Trace.

[MsJewel]

Trace, Thank you for your wonderful words. I appreciate you. Hugs, Julie

[Michael G. Smith]

This is such a soulful piece with perfect rhythm like the beating of a heart. I search and search this site and rarely find gems such as this. Fantastico.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for the lovely comment and compliment Michael. I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem. :) Julie

[~]

A stunning first verse!!! I really like the transition and the soft but intriguing tones of each line. Lovely my dear!!! :D

[MsJewel]

Thank you lovely lady :) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

sorry, I didn't gave points, so with this I'll do

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

How I love to read your poems, there's always that atmosphere of sensual love in it, but there's also a rhythm, mesmerizing almost, hypnotic. So well done, I love it. :) Rudi

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment Rudi :) Julie

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh this is fantastic, you can feel her sorrow and see her heartache.Your words painted such a clear image! Sad and so beautiful!

[MsJewel]

Thank you. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it :) Julie

[R Smith]

its Julie in heaven mode, the final lines are gorgeous, to hold the night and memories, how beautifully sad, every stanza has heart and soul 'You kiss my lips and brush the falling tears' a magical wish for us that can only dream of such a wonderful thing, lovely Julie :)

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Richard :) Julie

[dan]

A very sweet write with just a hint of darkness (haunted) to add a bit of variance to the mix. The effect is as if I was viewing the read through a thin mist, a slight chill in the air. Stellar writing as usual. take care...dan

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Dan :) Julie

[Confuser]

Julie: Another mile high vision of passion. Sonnets are beautiful but you've risen so high with this compilation. The imagery is rich and vivid; she is The Haunted One; I can see her on her pillow with tear filled eyes. All of your poems are magical, light lovely and this one is sad as well. I wonder as I read your work, if you truly know how beautiful your words truly are: Magnificent:
You may keep a piece of this heart that grieves
and I will keep the night, the memories
~~~
Thanks Julie: D

[MsJewel]

Dale, you have made my day with your generous words. Thank you so much for the lovely comment and compliment. :) Julie

[Confuser]

My pleasure, but they are true!

[Saddam]

It's great. I love sonnet so much for its sweetness and gorgeous composition.
Great write dear friend and as great read too.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Barbz]

Indeed, your Poetry is written from your heart, and seems to me, a tender one it is. I enjoyed it, related to it, inhaled it and want more of it! Thank you for your sensivity and execution of same......Barbz

[MsJewel]

Thank you Barbz :) Julie