Clouds of Pink

~ a romantic scribble ~

richard johnson art

 

 

~~~

When evening comes and clouds of pink

like cotton candy dreams

float visions of a softer time

a fantasy it seems

 

of soft pastels and fragile lace

sweeping the fading sky

as summer heat on cooling wind

breathes the sweetest goodbye

 

While ocean waves begin to dance

in white upon the shore

I’ll find our spot where wildflowers

the ones that I adore

 

growing in veils of ivory white

and gently as they sway

I’ll pick a bunch and wrap them up

in a lovely bouquet

 

Memories of a summer day

that passed with just a blink

and leaving me, when evening comes

dreaming of clouds of pink…

~~~

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Cotton Candy Dreams? That's interesting!

Strongly pen'd up. You already know how to value the words by shaping 'em with thoughts.. it's marvelous & perfectly a romantic lullaby belonged to your "Cotton Candy-Dreams" (Just teasing you). Excellent work!

[MsJewel]

Cotton candy dreams are the sweetest of dreams! My mother used to wish me "clouds of pink and cotton candy dreams"... I wrote this in tribute to her. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. :) Julie

[Adam Adams]

You momma had a very great perception 'bout the anticipation of your brightest future life belonged to the thread of literature. She had already envisioned you jumping right ov'r the "Cotton Clouds".. on having the victory of full-fill-ment of your dreams so I guess, 'tis's why she already used to wish you beautiful "clouds of pink & cotton candy dreams" where you live real nicely. You give a very great tribute to her. Your poetic talent's quite amazing as far as I got this in few days so... I guess, you'll be going something great with life.. in your future. Wish you much luck for your career! Keep it up!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind and generous words. Poetry is a hobby- but one I adore.

[Adam Adams]

Don't want to make your career in literature? (Mind me askin' you if it's not too much to ask... )

[MsJewel]

I would love to - but after six years of college, my careers pretty much set!

[Adam Adams]

Long Time ~ Very long time. Anyway... sometimes.. some things're meant to happen only with time so.. wishing you again much luck for your success wherever you want to achieve in with goodness.

[Sir Harold Chesterhill ..]

Just wonderful Ol' Chap! This makes me want to have my best man Geoffrey pour some sherry and prepare my ether in my sitting room whilst I look over my old military memoirs. It seemed like just yesterday that I was beheading Punjabi left and right in Kafiristan during the Sepoy Mutiny. I seem to recall that my good friend Magistrate Templeton was there, though he was just just a young Leftenant like myself. Why, he could kill Sepoy and rile the women at the same time, what? I, myself, am guilty of curing dirty puzzles of their hysteria over a bottle of Punjabi ether. Oh, what wonderful times! Bully!

Sir Harold Chesterhill of Hereford
(Dictated but not read)

[Magistrate Templeton]

Sire Chesterhill, you do me honor by saying such sweet nothings about yours truly. I also recall our adventures in Kafiristan during which we managed to find all sorts of trouble. Do you recall the cupid kettle drums on that one particular wrench whose father you killed in a duel? Nevertheless, fancy that we should become fast friends in that wretched place were a gentleman could not even get a proper glass of brandy while ordering press-ganged infantry into pitch battle.

Keep your mustache clean!

Magistrate Templeton
Translated at the College of Language

[icelandicblue]

You write with such beauty. I find myself standing in a swathe of light with each of your poems. You are an artist extraordinaire! I always want to just dive into your imagery.

[MsJewel]

I'm humbled by your kind and generous comment and compliment. Thanks so much :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You took me to beautiful places and create perfect visions. Thank you Julie for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you my dear friend :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Julie.

[andrew mitchell]

I love the 4th stanza. A delicate flowing write that reads and feels like a soft breeze MsJewel in the cool of evening in summer

[MsJewel]

Thank you Andrew :) Julie

[dan]

Julie, I thought of cotton candy just after reading the title in my RR queue, and sure enough the metaphor is used to gorgeous effect in the poem. This piece, like most of your others, delves into and divulges a story in gossamer wings, lets it fly around in its telling, then wrapping up in an ending that brings it full circle, completing the lovely journey succinctly. Lovely as is your norm! take care...dan

[MsJewel]

Cotton and candy and summer - a wonderful combination. Thank you for your kind words Dan :) Julie

[Ruth]

Such nostalgia always rests with vivid colours in the heart...memories are visceral, timeless emotion, beautiful piece :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Poppy :) Julie

[Valentine]

Lovely write, it is funny how different things awake different memories that take us back to special times in our lives. Valentine

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Maja]

I like how the poem has the ability to make me visualize it. I could pretty much see the clouds of pink floating in front of me, and I could feel the evening wind on my face. Good job! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely review :) Julie

[Trace]

This is the poetry that made you famous.

Your perfect ability to pull the reader along on a mesmerizing journey
To softly take their hand and guide them along a beautiful path
Lined with happy images and sensual memories.

And leave them with an enduring smile......
For they know they have just experienced something special.

Smiling here.
Trace.....

[MsJewel]

I'm so happy I could make you smile. You mean the world to me. Hugs, Julie

[guy drori]

I liked your descriptions. They gave me, thre reader, a very vivid image of what is occuring. Also your line breaks gave a nice flow to the overall write. Good job :)

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thanks so much :) Julie