Dawn

A Haiku

Dawn arrives and then the sun,

Flowers blossom, bloom and boom,

Insects chirp and merry hens cluck.

Author's Note

This is my maiden attempt in writing a Haiku. All critical reviews are welcome.

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

this a just lovely, but the syllable count isn't quite right, the lines need to be 5-7-5 syllables.
something like this :

dawn comes,then the sun
flowers blossom , bloom and boon
insects chirp,hens cluck.

Even in modern haiku where you can use less syllables the middle line should have more than the first and third lines.

I love the imagery ..

[Samuel]

Thank you so much for the review and the suggestions. The comments are very helpful.☺️

[Stella Armour]

any time you would like some help just ask :)

[Samuel]

Thanks a lot.

[sette]

this is a nice haiku ....

[Samuel]

Thank you sette.