In the Stars

I don't think I'm completely finished...

Happiness is in the Stars

And I'm steady lookin for the constellation

It would help if I knew what Happiness looked like

But I'm still searchin for an affirmation

Passed Andromeda

Monoceros... Tucana

Where in which hemisphere?

Scorpius, Vulpecula 

Sun rises, I'm waiting for it to set

Still haven't found my happiness yet

When Sun turns to moon

And reflects upon a lotus bloom

I wonder where you are

I wonder how far

Happiness, happiness where are you?

I wished on the stars

For once I want to feel complete too.

 

 

Reviews

[Meredith Leigh]

Wow, the vocabulary was lovley, and the poem itself was just so beautiful. The flow of it was so steady, and the meaning was breathtaking. Great work!

- Kriss

[sheerpoetry]

i love the flow of this peice
"Sun rises, I'm waiting for it to set

Still haven't found my happiness yet

When Sun turns to moon

And reflects upon a lotus bloom

I wonder where you are

I wonder how far"

great write!

[M. View]

That was very insightfull because every one is looking for some thing but no one know what it looks like it seems from happiness to feeling complete. I like the way you compared your searching to the depth of the universe for happiness and the feeling of being complete.

Good Write

[Amanda Crandall]

I like this poem and where it's going, but I don't think it's finished either. Awesome work so far though. Maybe try the poem without rhyming and see what you end up with?