Rid Me Of This Burden

Rid Me Of This Burden

A Poem by Kawaiikitty96

Rid me of this burden
It's been dragging me down
For three years now

I don't know why
I ever agreed to carry it
But I no longer want it

I've tried to shove it
I've sent it away
But it finds its way back to me

Just when I think
I've let go of it
It presents itself once again

It's like an anchor
Pulling me down
Into a murky abyss

Will I ever escape?

© 2018 Kawaiikitty96


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Constructive criticism and compliments are appreciated

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If the tags weren't there I would be at a loss to know what your burden was. It may be helpful to mention or allude to what it is somehow in your lines through symbolism or objects. The anchor metaphor is good yet kind of spent. With all that said, I commend you for writing out your feelings. That's what this place is for.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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If the tags weren't there I would be at a loss to know what your burden was. It may be helpful to mention or allude to what it is somehow in your lines through symbolism or objects. The anchor metaphor is good yet kind of spent. With all that said, I commend you for writing out your feelings. That's what this place is for.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

there are always baggage we don't want to carry but goes with us wherever we go and sometimes it needs lots of courage to put the baggage down for once in our lives and continue to live a new life or start a new beginning

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Salt and pepper...that's the condiments out of the way. As for constructive criticism ain't really my forte.
Regarding the burden, strength of character to ignore that which you do not cause or cannot control is the way forward.
Good morning K96

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Whatever your burden is at least you acknowledge it.maybe soon it will evaporate from your soul and your body will feel so much lighter.well done expressing your dilemma

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Kawaiikitty96

6 Years Ago

Thank you!

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Added on May 18, 2018
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Tags: Poetry, Heartbreak, Stress, Burden, Catharsis, Anxiety, Depression, Poem

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