Dancing Barbie

Dancing Barbie

A Poem by Kay Salisu Titilola
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Dancing Barbie run away,
Through the Alvin's tiny way.
Down the street she ran so fast,
Humming homie down the track.

Sing a song she loves to dance
She will come from where she ran.
All the way she comes again,
Hipping hooping all the day.

© 2019 Kay Salisu Titilola


Author's Note

Kay Salisu Titilola
My own tanaga by the way.
Thanks to Kescha for introducing me to this form of poem... Sounds like kids poem I guess.

Hope it makes some sense.

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well liked and made this old guy smile...

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Neville.
I'm glad it made you smile.
Neville

5 Months Ago


it did indeed.. and thank you..
This is so wonderful, very nicely done. I enjoyed this write, you did wonderful.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Kescha.
I'm glad you like it.
Sometimes it can be helpful to describe the poetic form in your authors notes, so we can also learn about this form of poetry & see how you fit your message into the form. This does sound a little childlike, but it's not becuz of the topic. It's becuz your language is pretty simple, the way a child might observe things. You can spice up a poem just by changing a word here & there . . . it doesn't have to be an overhaul of your message. Just changing "dance" to "jig" or "waltz" or "tango" adds personality to the moves. Instead of "she will come" (bland, non-descriptive), she will "scamper" or "emerge" or "skip" and such words add nuances of meaning that you don't find in a word like "come" (no nuances - dull & boring). Using more interesting & unusual words can make the difference in writing that sounds simple & childlike (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Yes, I agreed.
I'll take note of this next time.
Thank you so much, Margie.
I .. read more
This took me back to schooldays when I was about eight years old. This little poem evoked some very happy memories Kay. Life was not troubled then. Lovely job.

Chris

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Chris.
Childhood time is always the sweetest.
Christine Anne Shaw

5 Months Ago

It certainly was for me.
I absolutely adore this, Kay! I've never heard of a Tanaga before so this was a wonderful read and a wonderful find - thank you for teaching me something new!

I clicked on this one because of the interesting title and can I say, I was not disappointed. Brings back memories of a time much simpler and much sweeter, when running was seen as fun and play instead of a way to escape what troubles us.

A beautiful little portal to the past - thank you!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Poet.
You really put smile on my face with this.
great job, I like the school yard ring this one has. We can chant it while jumping double-dutch.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Cherrie.
That was my Intention.
This flows very nicely, it is fun and bouncy. I was worried at first that Barbie was running away from something sinister, and am very happy to learn that she is just merrily skipping and dancing to the music. Lovely.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Laura.
Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I like this poem..Flows like gentle stream.



Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Julia.
Kay, I must admit I'm not a scholar or academic in poetry or anything related. So, I'm clueless about the form, conformity to the form rules, etc. However, I like this poem. It has an attitude, perhaps an urban artist trying to find herself and the confidence to dance and sing true to herself. Probably way off-course here, but poets seem to understand every reader enjoys their own interpretation and experience.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Ray.
I'm not a literature scholar too.
I was just trying out a new .. read more
Not familiar with the form, but it looks and reads great. I'll have to look into it. Have a good day, kay.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Kay Salisu Titilola

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much, CD.
I'm not the type that deal with forms.
This is just a trial and.. read more

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Added on August 29, 2019
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