I Will Be Fine

I Will Be Fine

A Poem by Kay Salisu Titilola
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Will Be Fine
There you standing,
Mocking my pain,
As I'm trying,
To make my way,

Through the big storm,
Through the fire,
Through the thick thorns,
Through the mire.

With confusion,
In the hard time,
I won't give up,
I will stand firm.

Though the ocean,
Drowning me now,
You just hold on,
I will be fine.

© 2019 Kay Salisu Titilola


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Kay Salisu Titilola
Still on my adventure.

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The poem begins on an accusatory note, as though defying someone who is mocking the speaker's pain. The next verses relate a fierce determination not to be overcome by the present difficulties, which are not specified. The last verse again speaks to the original addressee, though not as defiantly. It is simply the promise that "I will be fine." Hopefully no vengeance is intended.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Not just a mountain to climb, but climbing with the added burden of a heavy weight on one's back. No one should mock another's pain. That really resonated and also hurt to read. Nothing is easy in life for most people. You show determination in your words. I like that Kay.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you for understanding my feeling, Chris.
I really appreciate that.
That's some force to push uphill, but negative energy will never amount to anything. I agree with Margie's suggestion, concerning the punctuation and capitalization in formatting your poem. Trust in the natural flow of your words.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Yes, thank you very much.
I'll work on the punctuation and character.
Thank you so muc.. read more
Kay, This is sincerely awesome, Love the set up as well. Love the words.
Very nicely written and set up.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Kescha.
I'm glad you love it.
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Li
Ohhh, I just love this, the strength despite all odds!! Amazing Kay, as always!!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Li!
I'm glad you love it!
I love your msg & how you use harsh-sounding imagery to suggest that the path is difficult. Most of all, I appreciate that you show the narrator drowning now, but determined that things will work out. As you've heard me say, inspirational writing sometimes ignores how hard it may be for some people to do the "rah! rah!" things that a poet tells them to do. Here you clearly empathize with how hard this will be & you show how it can still be done.

Since you are clearly interested in typesetting, I'm going to be picky with you now. When you capitalize at the start of each line & use comma at the end, you guide the reader to read this in choppy chunks, line by line. But you also use "enjambment" (where msg flows continuously from line to line) . . . so I would say, only capitalize at beginning of each verse & only use ending punctuation at the end of each verse. Those other capitals & commas interrupt a message that should be read in a more flowing way. Thanks for understanding my picky-ness! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kelly Scheppers

4 Months Ago

Great advice, Margie!
Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much again, Margie.
You've always been amazing.
I try to adjust on that... read more
barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Kelly, the compliment goes to Kay. She is literally a sponge that soaks up anything you give her. Sh.. read more
Another very positive piece but with a hesitant breath as the protagonist convinces themselves that their troubles, perceived or otherwise, will abate.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, John.

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Kay Salisu Titilola
Kay Salisu Titilola

Ijebu ode, Ijebu ode, Nigeria



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Just trying to reveal to the world about my point of view about life. What I think life is and How I think we can overcome. Through my experience and challenges in life, I've been able to figure ou.. more..

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