Our Love Story

Our Love Story

Right under the moonlight sky

when the night was damp in love.

There you make a wish on stars

that we could for life be one.

Your wishes poisoned by time

and soon buried your blissful thought

pushing our love far apart

keeping me far from your world.

Debris of the shattered memories

still clearly reflect the past pictures.

Though you forgot  to remember,

yet I couldn't remember to forget.

Author's Note

I rarely write about love.
I don't know if this really worth writing.

What do you think?

Reviews

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

This is such a wonderful write, I enjoyed this write Kay

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, Kimmie.

[John the Baptist]

The problem with romantic love is that it can blow hot and cold, leaving one of the partners vulnerable to hurt. That seems to be what happened in this case. The part of wisdom, difficult as it can be, is to write it all off to experience.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Exactly, sir.
Thank you so much.

[Chris Shaw]

A poignant poem about love which didn't last. Very nicely expressed Kay. Your final couplet most touching. Much sadness of expression here.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, Chris.

[Jason Gartin]

I love the line, "When the night was damp in love." Very nice poem. Keep writing.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Jason.
Thank you for your wonderful review.

[barleygirl]

I'm not usually a fan of romantic writing becuz some romantic writers tend to use similar imagery over & over. That's why I commend you for going outside the dotted lines with your imagery. Especially good: "the night was damp in love" . . . and the last two lines, played off each other, are brilliantly crafted & thought-provoking. Overall, this feels like a poem that's cranked out using skill, rather than passion. Usually your writing has more of a passionate edge to it, whereas this feels a little bit like you are practicing romantic writing -- and EXCELLENT practice! I am a fan of practicing everything in writing. We all have to start somewhere! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Beautiful Margie.
Your words are kind and you've been generous. I learned much from you and your corrections. You deserve the an accolade.

[Coyote Poetry]

When Love fade away. Hard to grasp and understand.
"Your wishes poisoned by time
and soon buried your blissful thought
pushing our love far apart
keeping me far from your world."
The above lines. A lesson we shall learn and thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Dancing Coyote.
You review truly irradiates my mood.

[Coyote Poetry]

I am glad and you are welcome my friend.

[Lorry]

When one loves more than the other, it can be devastating, but so is staying with someone who doesn't love you. It is a pain you never get used to and one that takes time to heal.... Unless you just get right back out there and find someone better.
Nicely captured life and death of love in three verses.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

That's a beautiful review, Lorry.
Thank you so much.

[Ted Kniffen]

Well, Kay, since you did write this, I guess it was worth it. LOL. Not all love stories have happy endings and what you have written, is a testament to that fact. Well done.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Yes, Ted.
Thank you so much!

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

This is just so wonderful, I enjoyed this lovely read

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, Kescha.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Love makes the world go around and you poem is a grand addition to love piems everywhere.
Kay, your poem is lovely and kissed with beauty.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Cherrie.