Our Love Story

Our Love Story

A Poem by Kay Salisu Titilola
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Our Love Story

Right under the moonlight sky
when the night was damp in love.
There you make a wish on stars
that we could for life be one.

Your wishes poisoned by time
and soon buried your blissful thought
pushing our love far apart
keeping me far from your world.

Debris of the shattered memories
still clearly reflect the past pictures.
Though you forgot  to remember,
yet I couldn't remember to forget.

© 2019 Kay Salisu Titilola


Author's Note

Kay Salisu Titilola
I rarely write about love.
I don't know if this really worth writing.

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The problem with romantic love is that it can blow hot and cold, leaving one of the partners vulnerable to hurt. That seems to be what happened in this case. The part of wisdom, difficult as it can be, is to write it all off to experience.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


A poignant poem about love which didn't last. Very nicely expressed Kay. Your final couplet most touching. Much sadness of expression here.

Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


I love the line, "When the night was damp in love." Very nice poem. Keep writing.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Jason.
Thank you for your wonderful review.
I'm not usually a fan of romantic writing becuz some romantic writers tend to use similar imagery over & over. That's why I commend you for going outside the dotted lines with your imagery. Especially good: "the night was damp in love" . . . and the last two lines, played off each other, are brilliantly crafted & thought-provoking. Overall, this feels like a poem that's cranked out using skill, rather than passion. Usually your writing has more of a passionate edge to it, whereas this feels a little bit like you are practicing romantic writing -- and EXCELLENT practice! I am a fan of practicing everything in writing. We all have to start somewhere! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Beautiful Margie.
Your words are kind and you've been generous. I learned .. read more
When Love fade away. Hard to grasp and understand.
"Your wishes poisoned by time
and soon buried your blissful thought
pushing our love far apart
keeping me far from your world."
The above lines. A lesson we shall learn and thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Dancing Coyote.
You review truly irradiates my mood.
Coyote Poetry

3 Months Ago

I am glad and you are welcome my friend.
When one loves more than the other, it can be devastating, but so is staying with someone who doesn't love you. It is a pain you never get used to and one that takes time to heal.... Unless you just get right back out there and find someone better.
Nicely captured life and death of love in three verses.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

That's a beautiful review, Lorry.
Thank you so much.
Well, Kay, since you did write this, I guess it was worth it. LOL. Not all love stories have happy endings and what you have written, is a testament to that fact. Well done.


Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Yes, Ted.
Thank you so much!
This is just so wonderful, I enjoyed this lovely read

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Kescha.
Love makes the world go around and you poem is a grand addition to love piems everywhere.
Kay, your poem is lovely and kissed with beauty.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Cherrie.
great last two lines...the past pictures forgotten on her side, remembered on the speaker's.
and really cool line "when the night was damp in love"
really well done poem...
the metaphors really work, and the imagery is "shattering."

j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much, John.
I've been trying to improve my abilities.

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Added on September 28, 2019
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Tags: life, Love, heartbroken, memories

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Kay Salisu Titilola
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Ijebu ode, Ijebu ode, Nigeria



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