Leave a Mark

Concealed were the days that I felt free

As the cold around no longer comforts me 

I seek a way to quench my curiosity 

A monstrous storm's always stopping me

When you dig your boots into the snow

You tend to feel like letting go

My world rotates and I've fallen down 

The sky now is unfamiliar ground 

What's blocking me from reaching out 

a transparent prison I can't get out of

I see you look at me through the glass 

I'm still trapped but I feel free at last

Author's Note

This ones about a girl named Harmartia Poe and her short story Like Glass, check it out its pretty cool! Just random poems about random people connecting humanity.

Reviews

[Harmartia Poe]

Thanks for the shout out, girl :) I love this poem and I am so happy you were inspired by my writing :)

[KeeD]

Your writing is really good I really need you to put up more of your work in your own time of course. Looking forward to being taken away by your words. -Kee

[Lydia Shutter]

Such an intensely emotive write with flawless rhyme that is not forced at all. Such poignant relfections....to feel caged is just terrible. I like the images your words created. Lydi**

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

p.s. I read it like 4 times that is how much I love it.

[KeeD]

You're awesome :)

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

What drew me to this poem was the title because I have one called leave your mark but I am very glad I have read it. I can relate to this poem and it kind of breaks my heart. You have conveyed such a strong emotion in such a short poem.

[ms. barrie]

I love the imagery of this....your words are always unique,
and delve into the psyche of one's mind...with eloquent brilliance.
the vivid torment of loss cuts deep in this write. incredible flow...
as well. always amazed Keegan by your immensely talented pen.
thank you for sharing! :)

[Frieda P]

Nice to see you back writing again Kee! Feels like being locked inside your own torturous mind, I felt that last stanza didn't have the same WOW factor as the rest of the poem, still a great read as always from your pen....x

[KeeD]

Haha you're spot on as always. these poems I don't really know why I post them I write them randomly when I observe something that sparks creativity, I hardly spend a few minutes on them but somehow I cannot hold onto words I just have to let it out there. I know their not the best and I should put a little more effort into my writing. Problem is i'm not serious enough about anything, about time eh? I was talking to someone the other day and I was telling her that yeah if there's anyone on here that looked out for me from the start it's Frieda P.. she's like a caring mother, who takes you under her wing and encourages you in the right direction. Thanks for always having my back Frieda! Love you!

[Frieda P]

Blahblahblah, aren't we blasé ? Don't make me slap you hon....ha If it comes that easily then you should know better, your creativity shines through so brilliantly, don't settle...I'd just leave that last stanza off imho, it makes a statement right there in that finish, that's just how I feel. You know I care, love you too kiddo! MWAH!

[Frieda P]

;)

[KeeD]

You deserve this, MWAH!

[Frieda P]

I'm still not tangling with the Kimmer! ha Mwah! xo

[KeeD]

well damn, i'd so want to see who'd win :P whiles i sit and wait for whoever gets to kiss it lmaoooo.. i'm dying typing all this..hahah

[Frieda P]

You're a wild & crazy guy Kee!

[KeeD]

But you like that though right? "fingers crossed"

[Frieda P]

All the best people are crazy hon....x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the torture of loss...not wanting to go on...feeling stymied in the grief...

the emotion burns through the snow in this one, and melts like global warming.

[KeeD]

Jacob thank you for reviewing me, you're always someone I can count on who makes me feel appreciated and like I have something more than just words. Jacob I was wondering since I respect you as a person and your writing, if you could give me any advise or tips on how to better my poetry and maybe take steps to one day get some of my work published. I've never had a teacher or anyone take interest or guide me and I've never been confident enough to ask till now

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you have a strong voice, kee....just keep writing, the more you do, the skills will sharpen themselves...write from the heart and the gut.
as far as publishing..after i had been writing for a good while...i decided to go that route...i just got myself a copy of poet's market, put out by writers digest...and looked for places that seemed to fit my style...there are so many magazines and most have their preferences...and there are so many styles of poetry, so many tastes...be who you are...and find the market that fits your work, rather than trying to write to fit a particular market.

then send several packets of stuff out...or submit on line...there will be many rejections to go with the few acceptances...but...you'll find a home for your work...and one thing i always do...if i get a rejection...i immediately send that work out to another place.
that's about the best advice i can give you.
your voice is yours, keep it, and hone it to the best you can.

[KeeD]

Thank you so much, truly this was immensely helpful. With people like you guiding me I hope to let my voice echo for years to come.