Bloody pulse

I wrote this today in 6th period, lol I was bored and someone called me a vampire, so I wrote a poem about vampires. I also had some inspiration from Salad fingers as a use of words.

Beating...

Can you hear it?

I can hear it

Running through my vains

 

Ba boom, ba boom...

Yep its beating

Drawing you closer

Are so unstable

You cannot control the urge

The urge to take it

 

Stop!

In your trakes

Still beating...

Pumping through your body

Feels good doesn't it.

 

You can smell it as it leaks

Leaking from the wound you caused...

 

Silences now...

nothing...

For the red water has spilled

No more bloody pulse

Beating

 

Author's Note

ignore grammar mistakes and spelling errors

Reviews

[Anicca]

I read your note about vampires after I read this poem, to me it didnt relate to vampires but self harm and the consciousness of the your blood flow when about to commit such an act. Still thats my interpreatation of a well written piece.

[ebur™]

great poem with a great usage of words. I though you came up with some unique phrases and the way you carried out your poem was really creative and interesting. great job! :)

[BeautifulDisaster]

i liked your choice of words. it was very interesting.

[Arthur Crow]

This is an explosive flow of crimson.. so darkly beautiful. I like the mood to be sure. Good writing!

[Ian]

I really enjoyed this... I like the way you used your words...
I really liked these lines:

"You can smell it as it leaks
Leaking from the wound you caused..."

I love those lines, they are so expressive...
Good job!