She is the dark

 

She is the dark where I hide from the sun

She is where I belong

Where unseen is the undone

Where silence is a song

 

She is the dark where I stay awake

Where my nightmares grow old

Where I dream of what I forsake

Where the sun is never cold

 

She is the dark where I never fall asleep

Where I’m always left alone

Where no one hears me weep

Where I await for another dawn

 

She is the dark

Where no sense makes sense

A star upon an ark

And still I can’t confess

That she is the dark

 

Author's Note

it's still unfinished I was too sleepy to finish it up !! enjoy
Reviews are welcomed .

Reviews

[Ruth]

We recognise a lot of things in life, and as long as we recognise them then all should be ok :) lol
Another powerful poem love!
xx

[Molly]

I like the line "where no sense makes sense" nice play on words. Might want to consider rewording "Where burns my cigarette/ And empty is my cup of coffee" those lines seemed a little backwards to me. I like the rhythm and the personification. The way the ending came suddenly out of the rhythm was nice too because it really emphasized it, as though you suddenly snapped back to reality after a dream. I like the heart of this poem :)

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

i like the repetition...it is greatly making sense, that is also inspiring....nice work!

[A.r. Bazian]

it is unfinished... but on the way to being a masterpiece!
this on is MUCH MUCH MUCH BETTER!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

This is like a song...it's beautiful...so quiet...and graceful...

[Emotionally Blank yet F..]

This is truly amazing! The flow is terrific and if this is the unfinished version I can't wait to read the Finished one. Great job :)

[Moonflower]

Perfect flow and rhythm here, lovely work.

[nono]

Aww This is beautiful nicely done around of applause for you!!

[David W Moore III]

Where silence is a song... this line I relate to. Sometimes, just sitting in silence, if you listen closely enough, you can here the song of creation. Definitely has my interests, wonder how it's going to end?

[Nimbus Thread]

Truly gorgeous. The will of the voice to persist in finding what he/she can't.
A lovely metaphor. "A star upon an ark." Well balanced as well.