Dreams in the Sky

A new chapter in life but hold your head high.

I know your nervous but girl your prefect in every way     
You might not think your are but it doesn't matter what you say
Eyes sparkling and your mind set up 
It's clear you know the way
You have waited forever girl 
Don't let this chance pass you today 
As for me, I'm not worried about you one bit
For I know you will be fine 
Soaring through the clouds with your hopes set high 
Never let them tell you your anything less
Because girl your a field of gold and your new story is about to unfold

Author's Note

I wrote this for a friend that means a lot to me and is about to go off to college. There are probably a lot of spelling and grammar errors. This is due to me writing this at 4am.

Reviews

[Tomoe Tellez]

Oh, this is was very sweet of you to write to your friend.

[Kittyskittles]

Thank you! She was really nervous about college so i wanted to do something for her.

[Rachel McLean]

I for one think that this is pretty impressive, especially seeing as it was written at 4am. I myself am completely incapable of creating poems, so I'm not exactly sure if I can critique on whether or not it is poetic, but I can definitely help with grammar errors, if need be.

[Kittyskittles]

Thank you. This was on my mind all day so I finally gave in at 4am. But wow that would be awesome. I would love to improve my grammar.

[Rachel McLean]

No problem, and actually they're not so much as grammar errors as they are simple spelling mistakes. For example, the 'your' in the first line should be 'you're', same thing in the second to last line. Those were the only things I could really find wrong. The rest of the things are just me being extremely nitpicky, like you might want to try using conjunctions a bit more. Like instead of you have, maybe try you've? You don't really have to use any of these suggestions.

[Kittyskittles]

You're never going to believe this but I just now got around to reading this and fixing the mistakes. I wanted to say thank you though. If no one every points out my mistakes I will never learn. Your advise was a big help!

[Rachel McLean]

No problem. And that's hilarious! Well I'm glad I could help