Love in Deed and Truth

To my beloved girlfriend I am marrying soon

I didn't need anything anymore besides holding those warm tender hands

Your beautiful eyes and smile fill my cracked heart

Even if it was everyday words that you said, I'd be happy and filled my head with happy memories

I want to embrace you once again and hear the words 'I love you' over and over 

I now have warmth and memories in my heart thanks to you 

I can now erase the bad memories and fill them up with kind and warm memories

For eternity, I will love you 

Thank you for your love that remained by my side. 

I want to protect that innocent smile forever and soon I lift the veil 

We'll have a bouquet of memories and will cherish them 

Being with you I realized that miracles existed because the pain in my heart doesn't ache of loneliness

The memories now are precious now and keep me bright and happy, thank you 

Even to the day after a century, I'll still have these feelings for you and love you tenderly

Reviews

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you for your love that remained by my side.
I want to protect that innocent smile forever and soon I lift the veil
We'll have a bouquet of memories and will cherish them"

This was so nice. It made me smile in the end.
I think you have a great talent!
You could become a great author/writer if you wanted to!
Keep up the amazing work!

Your friend,

C. Lee Battaglia

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Yay! I am glad. We're marrying next year once I finish college and I find a good job. c:

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Love in Deed and Truth'
ji-Suk,
Your poem is threaded through with thankfulness. How wonderful to read it playing through each line. Declarations of joy and celebration such as this are so lovely and inspiring. Your loved one sounds very special. I am so happy for you both.
Blessings,
Kathy

[¿]

They need your blessings, dear Kathy...they need to be in heaven as they're no more on earth...may these lovely souls Rest In Peace...Ameen...

[Kathy Van Kurin]

I understand and thank you for telling me. this kind of poem is sometimes difficult to know what is the proper response. Bless your every memory of these precious ones and bless you in your coming days. I wish you and yours all good.

Kathy

[Davidgeo]

Sappy and lacking any kind of aesthetic flow. It was like reading a note passed between high school kids. I don't care if English is your second language, you won't get critiqued on a curve with me.

Sorry. You asked and I read... but, your style does not appeal to me in any way.

[Davidgeo]

Ha... you think that's public humiliation? You must have an extremely weak psychological makeup... or you're just trying to virtue signal for some cheap attention.

Whatever you put out in public is fair game for any sort of criticism. If we all were just auto kind to another free thought would not exist. I find people like you to be a cancer on intellectual growth.

[Davidgeo]

Ha... that's a pretty weak comeback kiddo. A sign of desperation almost. Let me help you out, this part isn't that serious... these are informal comments on small hobby writing site. Also, mr genius, this isn't "public speaking"... these are TYPED comments ya moron. But thanks for the "word of caution" though... it doesn't seem like some cowardly passive aggressive bullshit at all, no, not at all. (you're pathetic). You should probably stop talking now... your knight in shining armor routine rings pretty hollow in a very obvious way.

[Davidgeo]

Real original. Virtue signal much?

[Davidgeo]

The more you carry on with your faux moralizing and spelling/grammar attacks the more negative attention this writer will get on his poem. Why would you want to drag this out on someone else's work? Don't be so selfish... go virtue signal on my work if you feel so desperately in need of showing the public how "virtuous" you are. If I didn't already know you were fake I'd suggest doing over private message but I already know that your whole point is to be seen by others. You really are a pathetic individual for how you are going about this.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hopeful and wonderful words for love.
"Being with you I realized that miracles existed because the pain in my heart doesn't ache of loneliness
The memories now are precious now and keep me bright and happy, thank you
Even to the day after a century, I'll still have these feelings for you and love you tenderly"
I liked the hope and kindness in the above lines. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks for calling it amazing! I greatly appreciated it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good work and you are welcome.

[Carmen Williams]

Very well written and very sweet. I have read multiple poems of yours, and this one is very different than the others I have read. I'm glad you have someone who makes you so happy.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you! We're marrying next May! Just gotta save up money for a nice ring for all the love she gave me!

[Melbourne Bound]

(Your beautiful eyes and smile) fill my cracked heart - I love this line!

Very sweetly written.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks so much! I am glad you liked it!

[Melbourne Bound]

Keep on writing!

[Donna]

Very beautifully written.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much for your kind comment. I am glad you enjoyed it.