Amnesia on the bed

Amnesia on the bed

A Poem by poddar kushal

Amnesia arose

 

I never pardoned you to wake me

With a splash of grief

Thrown on my closed eyes.

Arose I found me amid wetness.

A bed of ocean,

The salt of sweat.

Awoke I ran to catch you and held.

You melted like snows.

The play of “touch me”

Ended into dark amnesia,

Awoke I returned

To bed and waited…

 

 

© 2008 poddar kushal


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I agree, strong imagery with so few words you were able to portray and array of feelings in a short poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


strong imagery with so few words - very well done. The sense of heartache - hope, reality, and despair flow through this with laser like precision.

Excellent work.

jen


Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice write

Posted 13 Years Ago


a splash of grief thrown on closed eyes. the ghost of a relationship. Requiem for a memory. A haunting poem. Well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


At times amnesia is bliss because happy memories that can't be lived again haunt you with pain.Great writing.I wish we could hold a grudge against those who wake us up from our elusive happy dreams with a splash of grief but at times the wrongdoer is innocent and feels unduly attacked.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great piece...A total flawless piece. Such a great imagination..Very very vivid and intense piece...
Superb read overall :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your imagination blended with the imagination fo the reader to define what this poem might mean is amazing. Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your writing is always so creative and that is one thing I enjoy about it. I also appreciate that you seemingly leave it to the reader to define a meaning... I really like this one too. Thx poddarkushal

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this one..without really going into too much detail or even using alot of words you've really used you imagination. well done!

~~Theta

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aside from maybe a few grammer errors, this is a really great piece. Flowed well, and the imagery was wonderful. Wonderfully written. Nicely Done.


Great Write.

Rayne

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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poddar kushal
poddar kushal

kolkata, India, India



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life and trying to earn bread made me an advocate. mad at my own stressful self, turned to writing. poems mainly. but, there are several short stories published in my mother toungue 'bengali'.i live i.. more..

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