ascend of a human

Ascend of a human

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A yellow star with love and power shines.

Rays are all I need at this moment of

Cactus grown on the uterus of mind.

To the sun I rise from the sea of white.

Depressions are dense water fathomless.

From my hair the salt of grief dropping still.

Golden sand spreads a promised land to rest.

Nostril flows with light smell of fish and boats.

I remove the embrace of sea-algae.

The sand alone witness the love’s ascend

And, air brings the white cloth as my cover.

                       

Welcome me. I am human again.

 

Reviews

[Cece]

beautiful metaphor
between the body
and this world called earth
unemotional to emotional

is this the struggle
to become human
not quest i thought
"again" breaks in my mind

[Kasey Klein]

thanks for the invite.

Nicely done, my friend

[Carrie Montgomery]

"Depressions are dense water fathomless...I remove the embrace of sea-algae...Welcome me. I am human again. : perfect description of the struggle to break through depression and the struggle to swim to the surface...and being depressed DOES make us feel somewhat un-human, doesn't it?
"Rays are all I need at this moment of Cactus grown on the uterus of mind" yes! Just a little hope is all we need, a kind word, a kind deed, a person to say " I am here for you, let m ehelp" all these things provide the energy we need to stave off the darkness. Well, done, my friend.

[lori c]

ah, the birth of humankind. the ascension of the spirit above all that seeks to swallow it whole. i am such an ocean lover ; i love this metaphor. your writings are flowing easier, your images more graphic with each piece i am reading lately. i am filing this one away in my library. excellent.

[George Love]

Birth or rebirth, welcome to the world! Well done, excellent imagery. You are becoming a fine poet!

[Legion]

After reading this twice, I get the feeling of a baptism taking place. Don't know if that is what was really intended, but that is what I see. It is a great piece with excellent wording. You have done well with this one. Bravo!

[Just Manoosh]

Such an uproar and barrage of words, I hard knew where to start! Saying that the thread was easy to follow because in amongst the down pour were definate triggers that brought us back from the edge. Mx