sickness and heart

Sickness and heart

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Hand extends to touch yours and

It passes beyond

Only the wetness stays on.

Without a loss of

Something closer to this heart

You cannot be touched.

Wetness douses into heart.

Benumbed I swear!

 

Aggrieved eyes never

Absolve you for being you:

A thread of deleted mails.

 

 

Reviews

[Cece]

i read many times
lost in the meanings
put a night of sleep
to read again

i felt a ghostly thing
to reach beyond
to pass what is visual
only wetness is left

felt sadness of the loss
that which you can
no longer touch
i cry for more wet

[Kasey Klein]

I like it.

A thread of deleted email, just like that.

[lori c]

as always i have had to reread this several times. there is such weight to this that it took time to process it and i am sure i will return to this again. ,,,,eyes never absolve you for being you,,, is my favorite line. can't we just let everyone be who they are. why does one need absolution as if they have committed a mortal sin ? ,,,deleted mail,,, the action of trying to rid oneself of the person who perhaps mirrors what it is the deleter wishes not to see in themself. so much here. excellent.

[George Love]

Very well expressed. I like the imagery you use to drive your points home. Well done

[Bhavya Kaushik]

oh! This is such a sad piece and quite straight .. I won't say that it's a simple piece but it's having a unique weight of its own..
Beautifully written and very well expressed..with great feel and emotions..

superb write overall :)