I wuuuuuuuv you!

i wuv you joshie please read this everyday and know that!

dont do this to yourself
losing you would be a tragedy
dont think those thoughts
i just want you to be happy

i wuv you bud
you know i do
id miss you bud
id cry if i lost you

so please dont do this
i know you hurt
just talk to me about it
maybe i can help the hurt

Author's Note

ran out of rymes at the end

Reviews

[melancholia skies]

It's just a little strange for a fourteen year old to truly comprehend the feeling of love to it's fullest, and so I can't really take this poem seriously. Sure, it's nice. But... I can't help the feeling that this poem needs to be a bit more developed so the reader can understand the depth of your emotions to the written word. Using words like "wuv" makes it seem more of a puppy-love situation and if you wanted that, then that's just fine, but it didn't quite fit the poem's message. I think the message was a little blunt with your words, and had you played with them a little more, the poem would have been very interesting, and caught the reader's attention a little more. Do not take me the wrong way, it was a fairly enjoyable poem, but I think it has more potential.

[Nathan Durham]

This is a good poem. You used good words to describe the way you feel for somebody. This poem uses good descriptive words.

[Ethan Paz]

Good way to show your love to someone that is in need. Good job in showing that out clearly.

[Crowley]

Very personal touch with this one. Nice write.

[Starting Over]

I liked it! :) he seems like he need someone and he has you!

[Daniel Gardner]

Its good! My wife got me using a rhyming dictionary when I cant figure out the rest. You can find an online rhyming dictionary on google if you want to use it.