Clothing Optional

Thanks to Michael, for the inspiration! Our conversation sparked this idea.

As I peruse the pages here

I'm oft times overwhelmed

by over-use of metaphors

and words that are mis-spelled

But perhaps what troubles most of all

Is when a poem I've just read

Leaves me sitting here bewildered

for I've no clue what you've just said

 

Your words are so mellifluous

And there are ninetyseven lines

describing things most banal

yet no meaning can I find

I scratch my head, quite puzzled

for I don't believe I'm dense

but this richly veiled gibberish?

well, to me it makes no sense

 

I scan reviews before me

and the words sing glowing praise

seems THEY have found the meaning

in the issues that you raised

I want so much to join them

in lauding your latest prose

but truthfully, I'm reminded of

The Emperor's New Clothes

Author's Note

Tongue firmly planted in cheek yet again

Reviews

[Jack...]

Perfect, I love this. I was reading a poem the other day that had many people review it and say how wonderful and stunning and whatever, I thought it was crap. I didn't get it and I asked someone to explain it to me and when they did, I still didn't get it.

I am with you...

[LA Lorena]

LOL. I don't mind a little bit of deciphering and unravelling, but it gets a bit ridiculous sometimes. Glad you enjoyed this. I was getting tired of scratching my head and saying huh?

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I am with you... these people who continually use such big words in their poetry that you have to look it up, that takes away from the essence of the poem. most of the time I think they don't even know the meaning, just used a thesaurus to try and sound smart.

[writing mojo]

Fitting for a critical mind naked in the touch of radical displays, think out side of the box and the restrictions you place on communication will start to sway...love the honesty in this piece

[MOON]

Ha , ha great write. Feel like this often when reviewing others poetry . Guess that's the mystery of poetry and well one persons interpretation is another "what the..."
Lovely write.

[Michael G.]

This perfectly sums up what each of us was trying to get at, from two different directions. Well said, with a flow and a rhythm my old, feeble mind can comprehend. Thank you for putting this into thought so well.

[Distant horizons]

Brilliant. I sometimes think that what you speak of here is quite simply reviewing for reviews. Or i'm dense :-)

[KarinaT]

Been there - thank you for that. I though I was dense and not poetically minded....(which may still be the case :-))

[LA Lorena]

thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate it!

[FJ Davis]

Simple but sparkling--work that represents its own best case.
Nothing but praise due you, here, Loincloth Lorena.
Now, if we can only get more people to apply this same reasoning to "charismatic" politicians!

[LA Lorena]

Charismatic politicians are a whole other rant Franky-baby, one I'm going to leave for you to delve into. Consider the gauntlet thrown down.

[kimmy]

This was very well said and I know that I am guilty of this myself. I like to read though sometimes it comes out like crap and I know it makes people turn off to the story, even if it would have been good no one is going to be able to read it and make sense of some of them. I would love to be able to find someone to help with my writing as I love to write, and lately it has all been about real life:)

This hit close to home and I hope to do better so that everyone will like to read what I have and actually like it:) Thank you so much for sharing this poem:)

[LA Lorena]

I'm sure everyone has been guilty of this from time to time, myself included, but there is no shame in just saying "I don't get it".
thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

[kimmy]

Verey welcome, I agree with you there. I didn't ask for help at first because I thought oh no I will stupid, but actually since I have been asking for help I have done a lot better:)
I am so glad you shared this with us as it does help people sit back and think hmm is that my work? Who could I go to and ask? There was questions that popped into my head:) very good job.

[Muse]

ha ha ha....

in otherwords...why say it?

if it's empty and without constructive criticism...why say anything at all...and why wear anything at all? :D

[LA Lorena]

thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Always a pleasure to have you stop by.

[oxo]

hahaha. i even viewed other reviews too to say something. hhaha. i like this one, that's all i can say. :)

[LA Lorena]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for saying so, and for taking the time to do so.