Poet, Exposed

Do you ever wonder? decided to take it out of the box for this one. My thinking, that is!

Hooded nib exposed

he takes it in hand

under cloak of darkness

calloused, work-weary fingers

curl intimately

around its smooth girth

he begins the ancient rythym

slow, hesitant strokes

coaxing, teasing

gently kneading

pleading for sweet release

strokes grow bolder

gun-fire quick

furious, angry strokes

to wring forth

 each spilling seed

 retreat, pace slows

as the last drips out

 dreamily

drop by sweet drop

black pearls

upon the page

reading his words now

I can't help but wonder

is it me he thinks of 

when he writes?

 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I love this...not much else to say. I just seriously love the--and you will forgive the pun--flow of this piece. I'm not a man, so I have no idea what an actual wank session feels like (I can't believe I just said "wank session" in a review; especially a review of such a beautiful piece) but I do know what it's like to squeeze those drops of black pearls onto the page, and I imagine the release is just as sweet...The comparison is brilliant...and that question at the end; I've wondered that a few times, myself, but I'm usually way off base *laugh* Just another narcissist living in her own head ;-) But this is an extraordinary write, LA, seriously. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

-kimmer

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! I can't believe that someone wrote "WANK SESSION" in a review of my work either! LOLOLOL. Usually get those comments in my inbox. ;)
Thank you for the nice words Kimmer, glad you found it worthy. I do like to try to experiment with my writing and always enjoy surprising my readers with something unexpected.

[Relic]

I love wank sessions myself.

[Katie Lynn]

I have often compared writing to many things; none of which would include something like this! LOL great job though, the flow was beautiful and easy to read, wonderful!

[LA Lorena]

thank you! I was wanting to try something a little different here. It's only "dirty" if one perceives it in that way. ;) I like to make my readers walk on a path of my chosing, only to show them that I was on another trail entirely.

[Katie Lynn]

That's a brilliant way of looking at things, and I love it. Granted, I didn't see it as anything "dirty" until I realized it was rated mature. I always wait until the end of a poem to draw my conclusions, instead of being fooled by the beginning. But great work, nonetheless. :-)

[LA Lorena]

I don't know why I rated it mature really. Maybe I'm just insecure about potentially offending anyone's delicate sensibilities. The words are actually quite innocent, it's the author's intentions that are not. ;)

[Katie Lynn]

Precisely the case haha. Some people are just too delicate for something like this. :)

[Distant horizons]

Now I'm gonna feel guilty every time I pick up my pen :-)

[LA Lorena]

No need Lorry, you are not on trial!

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Frieda P]

lmao

[Clayton Bardwell]

Why do I feel so guilty writing this review? Very clever. Off to the shower.

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! Oh Clayton, your comment had me howling!

[Clayton Bardwell]

Done! Refreshed, relaxed, and very clean.

[Frieda P]

I don't care what you say, this is about SEX...lol, nice work, you're a master at this sort of thing. Takes a special talent to be so sneaky. 100/100

[LA Lorena]

So what is it exactly that I am a master at? SEX or SNEAKY? ;)
Thanks for the kind review and the Fave!

[Frieda P]

You figure it out, you're the master! ;)
...and I want that 'so called' pen lol