Ocean

Haiku about the ocean...

clouds dissipate

light grows water glows

silver fish leaps

scattered sunlight bright

ocean water diamonds

slip and dazzle

sand will find

those things atop the blanket

you're no exception

quiet white foam

ocean lace on the sand

exhausted

illumination

sudden strange light in the deepest dark

the fish are hunting

paths of stars

map ancient ways to

the islands

Author's Note

Remember, haiku don't always have to be 5 - 7 - 5 syllables. Read about them in Wiki.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

A dazzling poem of ocean life, the treasures within and the deepest darkness. Kudos!

[LJ]

Thanks very much! These haiku were really fun to write, and it was gratifying to meditate on the ocean, both its surface and its deeps. There is so much 'there' there, as they say. I'm very glad you enjoyed this!
LJ

[Sami Khalil]

All wonderful. You are welcome sir.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Poet... the last Haiku is my favorite... the others are
like Pearls of the Sea... I believe in lost Treasures and Mermaids...
tenderly, Pat

[LJ]

Sorry for the late reply! Thank you for even calling me a poet!

[LJ]

I appears that part of my first reply disappeared. Hmm. What I said was mainly that I hope you keep your beliefs always, and get to visit the ocean. And thanks again!
LJ

[Betty Hermelee]

whatever you call it, the images are vivid and soft, I fell as if I'm standing on the sand watching different colors, shapes, smells, creatures of the ocean... and the texture of sand.
Well done
Best, B

[LJ]

Thank you, Betty. I'm glad you feel you're there when you read these. Good!
LJ

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome LJ!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not sure how the Japanese feel about that, but yes, haiku can vary from that count these days.

I like all of these...how they are separate, yet together tell a story.

illumination for more than the fish...

j.

[LJ]

thanks! very much!
the way i learned it, the japanese count the syllables differently anyway, in their language, and many write a different number of syllables and have for a very long time. the rather ancient writer 'basho' is used as an example. the important parts have japanese names, but are summed up by saying nature must be in a haiku in some way, and a shift, a 'cut' so to speak. there are three parts which i'll try to get back to you about, if desired. i'm glad you enjoyed these haiku. (:
LJ