Frozen Tears.

Alone, Just siting there crying her eye's out.
Crying aloud for help, only the one she calls for is dead.
Her hands covered with bright red blood that smells of steel and iron.
Tears flowing like a river down her face.
Pain deep inside her heart.
Mixed feelings inside her, no where to turn.
Scared of what might become of her worthless life of pain.
Trying to break chains holding her down, keeping her away.
Cold hands wrap around her -throuht- squeezing the life out of her.
Seconds later she's one the floor lifeless and dead with frozen tears on her now pale cheeks.

Author's Note

please help me correct any spelling mistakes!

Reviews

[Cherryblossom]

i like this it is very good

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

A powerful and emotional piece. I see that you asked for help with any spelling mistakes. There are barely any. In the opening like 'Just' doesn't need a capital letter plus it should be 'eyes'. In the last but one line there's another spelling mistake though I am unsure what word you meant to put there. 'Throuht' could be thought, throughout, through or fought. Depending on what you mean. Other than that its a intense piece. It could do with having a couple of stanzas. That said it is written well and with emotion.