Samantha My Love

I fell in love in love with Samantha but she didn't love me back.

Black hair,too beautiful and too curly.

Black eye,too hazel and too sexy.

Her laugh was too innocent,

like the laugh of an angel.

Screaming wild being too childish,

but her voices were harmony and melody.

Her face was of Aphrodite's,too divine.

No acrostics could define her beauty.

Although she left me for her Ares,

her gleaming smile still stays in my mind.

Where ever you are,What ever you do,

I still love you Samantha.

Reviews

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Ashley

I thought I would say hello and picked this piece at random, partly based on the mystery of the title (as I suspect some of us do) to review as a starter.

Style? No complaints.

Content, theme and mode of expression?

I like the repetitive use of the adverb 'too'. It is as if you are not sure whether you are complaining about her or your own attitude as you loved but lost.

I admire the way in which you allude to Ancient Greek mythology, she as Aphrodite (Goddess of Love and Beauty) and the one to whom you lost her, Ares (God of War). It is as if in a battle you lost out to him.

At first I found the use of the word 'acrostic', out of place and otiose. But on further reflection, I could see the link between the poem you write and the reality that acrostic poetry was the invention of Greek (and indeed Roman) authors.

Well written.

Keep writing as they say.

With my kindest regards


James

James

[Ashley D'Costa]

Thank you for your review.

[Antoñyo]

I never studied poetry but here's my expert analysis...It's just pretty damn good.
Got the point across just fine that love lingers...and hope floats.

Thanks for sharing

[Ashley D'Costa]

thank you for the review

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem of love. Sometime people make us crazy with desire from a distance. These people will haunt us for not trying. I like the complete poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Ashley D'Costa]

Thank you for your review.