The Law of Attraction

A piece about how people and things are pulled together. Gravity. Attraction. Whatever the reason.

The Law of Attraction

 

 

The law of attraction.

Gravitation pulls
Found bound in shadows,

Defined in darkness I find

A struggle for direction, a stand.

Being bent to your will,

But will I break you with mine?

Stamina beaten down

Within a captured destiny

Abashed by a controlled dignity.

Hidden within,

Kept in check,

Not found in vowels
(the u and the i)

But in a number

(the one).

Expressing the equation

Of a common denominator

Left off the page

But lifted to life.

 

 

Rules written to follow,

Broken or not.

 

 

Legion

26Apr08

Reviews

[JC]

I found this quite an interesting piece. I have to agree with Rain about the flow. In the middle, I think you either need to go with giving the vowels as part of the stanza instead of making them as a subtitle, or eliminate them altogether.

"Stamina beaten down" ... definately my favorite line. It reminds of giving up trying to fight the inevitable.

Kudos!
JC

[alienkid]

i liked this one a little more. i can tell there was a distinct purpose behind this writing. this piece can apply to others more easily, too. i like the free verse style used here because it really exemplies how the laws of attraction don't follow a specific structured pattern, as opposed to being more ramdom and spontaneous.

[Shara Faskowitz]

Really interesting. Seemingly spare, but lots going on here, so much wordplay...and even letter and number play. This is a very clever piece of writing with more depth than one quick read reveals. It needs at least a few careful reads to catch and appreciate the many nuances.

[ElJays Nicholas]

I like the choice of words you use to describe how we feel when we think we are chosen or destined for something or for somebody -- "Controlled" "Captured", an inescapable grasp, and we struggle and fight against these feelings. It is as though individuality and togetherness cannot be held in the same hand...

[Hviske]

That is deep i totally get it... i loved it.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Expressing the equation

Of a common denominator

Left off the page

But lifted to life.... I really like this, very nice and it makes me think. Excellent writing!

[Tai Chi Italy]

To struggle against such Laws of Attract are found within the lines of your great poem as I read it, Balancing the Will, is the key to satisfaction gauranteed in my world anyway. Love, attraction, destiny pulling two, no matter what else they try and do, is part of the journey in most (u and i) lives from my experience. Love just doesn't happen, attraction kicks in first and foremost or there is no beginnings of love at all. A fine read and so good to read on this cloudy Cornish sunday afternoon. Smiling at you, Tai

[Wildfleour]

Opposites attract???

[April Child]

Not found in vowels
(the u and the i)
But in a number
(the one).

I really liked these lines, they jumped right out at me. I liked the whole piece in fact it left me wanting more.

[Emily B]

Wow! Awesome stuff . . .