A way out

Something for a contest.

Desperate, searching for a way out of his lonely life, wanting the pain to end.

Reviews

[AK]

So short, so short, only a single sentence and yet it has this effect on me. It has this aura of desolation and sorrow. I could imagine a boy struggling with a heavy burfpden on his back, tears streaming down his face, wanting, waiting and hoping that the burden will be removed and he will be spared. I loved this piece. Keep writing!

[Legolas]

Thank you very much. Yes, that is the kind of boy I had in mind. I am glad I was able to make the boy so real to you. Thanks, I will.

[AK]

(:

[Baby Ricochet]

Everyone's felt like that in dark times. Great Write.

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Falling Leaf.]

My friend, how is it that you can pack such a punch is such a short piece? I have the answer for you: talent.

Now, I'm not saying that you need to write it this way, but I'm just offering my honest opinion. This is how I would have wrote this piece:
"Searching for a way out of his lonely life
Desperate(italicized)
Wanting the pain to end."
Just something to think about. Don't go rewriting it if you don't like it that way. I just wanted to express what I was thinking.
Anyway, well done!

[Legolas]

Thanks. Ill think about that.

[Pax]

short piece that speaks volume my kind of thing.with such sorrow painted in such short manner. well done.

[Legolas]

Thank you.

[Nath]

Speaks a lot of the sorrow behind that one line. But as with a lot of things, just wanting something to end is not satisfactory as long as there is no desire to begin something new as well. If there is to be a change, it needs to bring something better than what is ended.
But the wish for an ending is well portrayed.

[Legolas]

Thank you Nath.

[Archia]

A like the story in this short piece, and how it shows many different aspects of it and the emotion felt.

[Legolas]

Thanks.

[Isabelle Faye]

Wonderfully done! Each word is filled with emotion, feeling seep out from every letter. Not a word is wasted, so simply said but gracefully done.

[Legolas]

Thank you.