Down the drain

Down the drain

A Poem by Ina Waltz
"

Trying to mix the act of suicide with the act of pouring cold tea down the drain; such a waste in both cases.

"

As I watched the red liquid escaping down the drain of my sink


disappearing for good into the darkness of the sewer


I got mad at myself because I forgot to drink my blueberry tea again

© 2012 Ina Waltz


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not sure if I like the "for good" part... once it's down there it is gone.

Nice description of the tea--also the blue is a good contrast to the red blood. Great metaphor/comparison.

... probably not the best day for me to read this though... it's a bit triggering lol

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Blueberry tea is actually red, not blue. :) Thank you for your review.
I'm sorry it was trig.. read more
eglantine

11 Years Ago

oh, well then lol now i want some tea
This is clever. Short and to the point. I like it. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Thank you, glad to hear that.
intriguing, unique write

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your review, it made me happy that you thought of it as intriguing and unique.
clever i really enjoyed this piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Glad to hear that! :D Thank you.
very cleverly written great work

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Stanley.
I think you did a great job...It paints a pretty horrific, yet strangely calm picture

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Thank you, dear.
Very nice :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

Thank you!
dunnia

11 Years Ago

Ur welcome
good bjt short

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ina Waltz

11 Years Ago

I was trying to show the fragility of one moment and one thought. Thank you for your review! :)

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Added on November 9, 2012
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Tags: tea, blood, suicide

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Ina Waltz
Ina Waltz

Zagreb, -- Please Select --, Croatia



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I write poetry and short stories. I also draw and paint abstract images that my mind creates in order to understand the world and myself. I cannot live without creative outlet; when I don't write/pain.. more..

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