You Win

You Win

A Poem by Leonard Birch

You win

Every night I go to bed,
my dreams are of only you,
 yet it’s been, some twelve long years,
since you said we’re through.

I still can’t understand your reason,
for saying farewell, goodbye.
Sometimes I have to pinch myself or
just breakdown and cry.

I guess that’s life and many do,
the same as you have done.
But deep, deep down, my treasured friend,
I know that you have won.

From now on, I’ll look ahead,
there’s bound to be another.
But dreams are dreams and reality is;
I’m sure I will not bother.

© 2013 Leonard Birch


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Leonard Birch
I am not really happy with this, but would appreciate feedback.

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Why are you not happy with this? It's great! ;)
This poem captures the pain of longing and the hurt of yearning perfectly. This poem is universal; everybody feels such emotion whenever a relationship fails, a family member or friend dies, etc. This poem can be interpreted in so many ways - yet, it is so true. I loved it!
Great write and splendid read! Keep up the amazing work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Leonard Birch

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I wasn't happy with some of the sentence structure. ie. the third line of the 1st.. read more
Antoñyo

10 Years Ago

"It has made me feel a lot better" is what it's all about....nevermind bloody structure!
This, in my opinion, (I'm tempted to say "can only come from a man" but I won't) captures well that point of giving in we are forced to have to deal with...reluctantly, but with strength to move on.
I like it

Posted 10 Years Ago


Leonard Birch

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend. I do appreciate your wonderful comments and praise.
Cheers
Leo
Antoñyo

10 Years Ago

The pleasure was mine..Thanks for sharing.

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Leonard Birch
Leonard Birch

Albany, Western Australia, Australia



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