A Cup of Tea After Dad`s Death

a true story

Exactly the right colour, the perfect amount of milk,

one of Mum`s specials, as we gathered round the

table in the kitchen and put the pictures together,

the blue lights and the friendly doctor, who asked

what to do with his dressing gown.

Well it was rather a nice one said Mum.

Then it all went quiet, too late to go to bed,

too early to get up. 

Reviews

[Perri]

Captures the mood of loss perfectly =]
Very good ^^

[eglantine]

Hm, have you ever read "The Colonel" by Carolyn Forche? Your writing style, at least here, kind of reminded me of this. Although nice as is, I def see room for expansion and opportunity for amazing images here to express the emotive breaking through the lines.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review ! And you are right, there`s a lot of room to work with, a big subject for me that I`ve only just started to understand and talk about.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I know that quiet of losing a father...the stunned, surrealness of facing the world with him gone. This is heartbreaking, yet so realistically put. I'm sorry.

[FJ Davis]

Capturing a stultifyingly awkward span of time; portraying people who are behaving as if life must and will go on--but are horrified at how the f**k it could; stunned at how quickly a grievous loss is seemingly being "resolved."
Heartrending, Leslie.

[Anne Timmins]

wonderful poem

[G!o]

Tell me i ain't wrong to have felt sad when reading this? This is those sort of poems short and direct and lovely...sorry bout the loss Leslie