Summer Rain

a sudden rain

Summer before the air closes

                down with heat

                locked in a plastic suitcase

smelling of earth

               the sky ready to darken

               and break,apple-split

the crash of an unhinged window

               leaves in flight,

               the light lung grey               

as ants in water and panic

              heaven full of bolts and screws;

              now aware of loss.

               

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

Love the imagery and descriptions you used. Very unique. And a wonderful poem!

[JLD]

Great imagery! This takes me back to summer. I feel the heat, the sudden shift, then the forceful rain. Well done.

[carol burgess romance]

the sky ready to darken
and break, apple split....ohhhh I so enjoyed your imagery......powerful and such an impact

[Peter H]

this poem tells a stark image of man or maybe a man and his comrads on his way to a beautiful summer get away , they pack all their favourite beers and food etc in a cooler .and a sudden down pour of rain starts which ruins there day at the beach its not a normal down pour it carries thunder and lightning within its forte , the people in the water briskly and hysterically make haste out the water . to find a safe spout as the rains ruins a great outing . great poem i got so much out of it lovely write .

[David Scott]

I enjoyed this poem.
I could feel the flash of tragedy and the energy was charged in every stanza.
Simple, direct, and unusual. Still, it read as a familiar sight and sound with all the suddenness and severity of real life.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A poem that lingers. Leaves a sense of stasis. Whimsical in a way, the thought of a rain shower stealing my sun. Wish you would send read requests Leslie as I see I have missed many wonderful pieces!