Salt

Forest,the next.

Charcoal,iron,salt.

A grey ship sleeping under Crete.

Lines in a rooming sky,

as simple as a glass of water.

I am standing next to myself,

outside of myself,

before an empty house.

Reviews

[RedInk524]

Reminds me of how i feel sometimes about the current process of moving im in. Simple, yet complicated. When going to a new home, it feels like going into a strangers home.

[April Child]

as simple as a glass of water.

Nicely done.

[Luke Ritta]

perfect poem....very good

[MYSELF]

A sheer power of Imagination.....Works sweet and simple yet has a power to drift a mountain....
"I am standing next to myself,
outside of myself,
before an empty house."
A great and strong ending chosen to wind up the poem.

Simple yet complex...
I liked it..
Thanks for sharing...
Regards
MYSELF

[Amanda Lee/ Isolated Dr..]

Love the lines "I am standing next to myself... before an empty house."
Very interesting, dream-like state of existence. Well written

[Rikkevi Rue]

Mmm. I like the openness of your poem, the space in between the simplicities of concepts, yet each is boldly impressive. I can picture the drawing...a fine pen and ink...or the imagination of the event. Either so nicely conjured by your intriguing word choices. Simplicity is powerful