Hell Hole

These thoughts in my head,

Make me wish I was dead.

The truth will never be found.

Especially when I'm six feet in the ground.

I'm too weak to even cry.

Damn I'm sick of this lie.

I'm just waiting on my turn,

For me to go to Hell and burn.

The demons in my mind,

Want me to do things that are not kind.

When I close my eyes I see,

These demons becoming free.

Soon they will have complet control.

And my soul will forever burn in the Hell Hole

Reviews

[afra]

great write !

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!! Such a great poem!!

[Steven Cash]

This is real powerful... but wait, is this a song?

I was singing the lyrics to the tune of 'Beneath my Bed' by of Monsters and Men

it fits perfectly, and similar message

[Secret Lullaby]

haha i wrote this last night befor I went to bed. Its sounds like a song? Cool!

[Steven Cash]

yea, seriously sounds like the song

[Secret Lullaby]

Im going to have to look it up(:

[Steven Cash]

kk

[Secret Lullaby]

You're right it does kinda sound like it(:

[Steven Cash]

yep yep

[Personne]

"I'm too weak to even cry." Crazy feeling. This feels hopeless, just waiting to be for punishment for eternity. And then the demons, everyone can relate to that. We have to fight human nature sometimes just to be kind. This poem just opens up the real and ugly side of people. And it also shows how giving up is just so easy! I really love this. Yeah, great write(: Also the rhyming is great! Flows nicely.

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks(:

[Ella]

The truth will never be found.
Especially when I'm six feet in the ground.
I don't know why but I love these lines, makes me think of the song The Dead Can't Testify by Billy Talent. Very well written and it paints a beautiful picture... beautiful in the deathful (I know it isn't a word :P) way...

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks so much(: Glad you liked it! Well im going to have to look that song up now(;

[Ella]

Welcome, I love it. It's amazing! :D
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bfryvE8sIo4

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks so much!

[Ella]

Welcome, lol, it is one of my favourite songs so I hope you like it! :D

[Secret Lullaby]

LOVE THE SONG!!

[Secret Lullaby]

This song is going to be in my head for the rest of the day now:D

[Ella]

Yes! Victory! :D
And good, haha! :) It's been stuck in my head for like a week, lol

[Michael Thrower]

Reading this shook me. Reminds me of the Zodiak killer. Very nice description and way to make it sound tense :D

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks(: