Helping find someone

Helping find someone

A Poem by . o O (Deepest_Thoughts)

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Those eyes looking straight at me,

So empty and dull.

I wish I could only see,

Why they bury into my skull.

 

They look all wrong,

Full of sorrow and despair.

But they look so strong,

And yet they do stare.

 

Your body language has changed,

Giving off a small threat.

This seems so deranged,

But I feel like we just met.

 

The new you wants me to leave,

To be gone and never to return.

But with that the real you would grieve,

So my back I will not turn.

 

I know your still in there,

Behind a locked door.

So I will sit here and glare,

Emotions ready to soar.

 

I want to free you,

From this prison your in.

He wont let me through,

I swear he wont win.

 

I say things to make you smile,

Hoping you can still hear.

This being my style,

Minus the fear.

 

I see a glint in your eyes,

The strange you fighting it.

I can see through his lies.

Not fooling me one bit.

 

The ice has been broken,

His shield taken down.

The real you has spoken,

But still there is a frown.

 

I wont stop trying,

I will find the key.

If not, I risk dying,

The real you inside crying.

 

I say that I love you,

It is not a lie.

You know it to be true,

Or I would have said my goodbye.

 

The darkness has cleared,

The light now your guide.

Nothing more to be feared,

With one swift stride.

 

My arms open wide,

You hug me so slow.

Both glad that I tried,

Never letting go.

© 2009 . o O (Deepest_Thoughts)


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Author's Note

. o O (Deepest_Thoughts)
This poem goes out to my very best friend. He was going through some hard times and I knew I had to be their for him. And well I don't really care if the poem has some problems because I wouldn't dare change it. So enjoy and feel free to comment. <3



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I really like this and I can tell you put alot of yourself into it, and that you spent alot of time on it because it's so long and very heartfelt. It shows much improvement since your earlier work. Good job, keep it up!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Beautiful. Beautiful.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I know what you put into this poem, and I know what it means to me. I wish you truly could read my heart and know what it and you meant to me. Thank you for never leaving my side when I push you away becase as you know, that is not me, but some someone else you know who I am always tryng to escape from. TY, I also love you very much.

me

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Posted 14 Years Ago


i really love this poem, and how you struggled to help out your loved one.
The emotion is felt.
"I know your still in there,

Behind a locked door.

So I will sit here and glare,

Emotions ready to soar."

usually, many people leave their loved one because they see how much they have changed and dont really bother to help them out. and through that stanza, you mentione how you still were by their side..
-ruth

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Posted 14 Years Ago



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