The Snow

Well today it is snowing a whole bunch its rare in houston. So i wrote this during ELA as i looked out the classroom window

Its snowing!

Houston’s simply glowing

It's always just hot

But today its not

 

It never really snows here

It's usually clear

Everyone admire’s the snow 

Its falling down, to us kids it’s a show

 

We can’t wait to throw snowballs

As it falls

As we look out the class window, the snow is pure white

Then it melts, Its such a pretty site

 

This may seem like I am making a big deal

But you don’t know how we in Houston feel

The snow..

Please don’t go!

Reviews

[Impulse]

I could sense the excitement and wonder in this one. Made me happy to read. Nice flow and structure. Excellent =]

[Brokensoul]

I wish i could be there with you !

[Lexi]

This is so cute(:
It made me smile xD

[Aimee]

I'm jealousss.
[:

I love the snow.

This poem's great. :D

[Bud]

I love the snow tremendously. Something about the pureness, innocence it possess. Maybe even the refreshing newness of it? Enjoyable read. Put a smile on my face. Thanks for that. Excellent!

[Thorn]

Just lovely ^^
It's always cold where I Iive, but we don't often get snow either.
This poem would sum up most peoples' feelings about snow.
Well done!

[Tina Kline]

This is a wonderful poem in celebration of snowing. Here where I live we all get excited when it snows. Snow is very beautiful. I love your poem and think its very well written, very nice rhyming. Over all, I think its just a very very wonderful poem. Love it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Here in Michigan. We say here it come again. A field without foot prints is a beautiful site. Snow can be beautiful and fun if you are young. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Gabi Celaya]

"Everyone admire's the snow" In this line you don't need the apostrophe before the s, as it's not possessive.
"Its falling down" In this line you do need one.
"Its such a pretty site" Apostrophe needed again. And don't capitalize it, it's not a new sentence or line. Oh, and I suspect you meant "sight" which is means something you see and is the more usual expression, a "site" means a place.
"how us in Houston feel" Should be "how we in Houston feel", or better still (if you're not using a regular line length and meter) "But you don't know how people in Houston feel"

It's otherwise good, but you should try using a few less exclamation marks. They're a bit numbing after the first one.

[Krazy On The Outside]

I know how you feel. I live in Tennessee and it never snows like ever.
I like your piece a lot! Great job! =)