The Scarlet Trials

Her name was Scarlet, as well as her cheeks and lips

Amazon tall, sapphire eyes, blonde hair hugging her hips

 

Being desired was her worst flaw, throwing away men like trash

One by one they came to her door, pronouncing their love so brash

 

Although her middle name was Marie, some might say it was Vain 

With men chasing her like dogs would rabbits, she was never to be obtained

 

______ would be the death of her, his admiration too strong

No one considered this a crime, no one thought of it as wrong

 

When the officers found her Crucified, they just turned their head

Even the owners of polished badges, endeavored hers truly to their bed

 

In this town a funeral was considered tragedy, but with Scarlet it was farce

Angry mobs of wives, daughters and mothers celebrating, now that her presence was sparse

 

Her name was Scarlet, as well as her cheeks, lips and blood

Amazon tall, sapphire eyes, blonde hair drenched in Scarlet after the flood 

 

Author's Note

Ignore structure. I know it is very simple but I just felt like writing tonight and wrote the best that I could. I will probably end up rewriting it when my mind is overflowing with descriptive words instead of not-so-creative ones. I know it's pretty bland compared to my normal writes.

Reviews

[SparrowSong]

It has been a long time since I've myself written in rhyme, I find it it difficult to return to now, and am always blown away when I see it done so flawlessly. This is quite a tale, and though Scarlet is one many would like to dislike, I find myself drawn to her. I like the repeat lines in the beginning and end, with just a slight change in your last words. Well done.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid rhyming poem...Bravo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this...i don't care for rhyme too much, but when it is subtle and seems much more natural than forced, i'll buy it.

this has good story to it...and the last line is a perfect ending.

nice piece...

all the women in town cheered...yes.

[Tiffany Kelley]

And here I was worried about the rhyme scheme not being creative enough. I am very glad someone thought it was nice and subtle.

I really appreciate your review. I was hung up on the last line longer than the entire poem. I wasn't sure if people would understand what meaning behind the "flood" was but it looks like they do! I was also concerned with it's length. I thought about adding to it but then again I think it is strong as is.

Haha yes all the jealous hags cheered the death of the beautiful Scarlet. :P

[jacob erin-cilberto]

less is more...doesn't need to be longer...the poem says what it needs to...any more would just be window dressing..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the last line...yes, so important...i think last lines and titles often make or break a poem.

[Drifter]

I'm impressed. And to be honest, I kind of like the blank line before "would be the death of her." You've got talent ma'am. Well done.

[soliloquy]

This was nice.....nice to read. It seems to come off as a prelude to a really good book. Interesting stuff!

[Faffy]

well i dont think there is a lot to improve on T.K (can i call you that ?) i like it quite a lot mainly because of how clever the idea was and i like how you structure your poems, its different to the standard 6 word 5 stanza poems you see normally. it also flows remarkably because of its rhyme which i loved. i may be a bit thick when i ask this but what is that blank space in the line '

'______ would be the death of her, his admiration too strong'

anyway great read liked it a lot =)