Cut

So here we are
I never thought you would stab me in the back
But hey
What are friends for
You always were one crazy sucker
I remember the time
You made me promise to love you forever
We sliced open our veins
And shared our blood
You said
I was your blood brother
Friend
You are no brother of mine
Back stabber
No I'm not your friend
I am nothing to you now
but a memory
One that will defianately
Not keep you warm
Within the womb of your old age
Not now
Because sweet friend
The last time you said cut me here and share
I forgot to sew you up again
I forgot to undo
The thing that we had created
I was fed up
Bored to death
Death
Has such a nice ring to it
I wont cut myself anymore
Not now your gone
Don't forgive me
Please I never want
Even that from you
I hope your bleeding brings you
All the desires and twisted peace
That you deserve

Reviews

[Dani]

Very interesting ending. I really loved how the character changed; he began weak and subdued, but got back at his insidious friend in the end.

[MichelleClay]

Raw and full of emotion. I really liked this. Well done!

[northern monkey]

Powerful Pebbles, strong emotions eloquently expressed. Quality writing. Rollon your next piece...

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

My God, I can feel the pain and the anger within your words. A strong poem my friend.

[Derek S.Keck]

You had me hanging on to the end of every line, so intense. I love the bite that this poem carries, you capture that moment of emotion so well! I love the final three lines, it carries all the bitterness and intensity of the poem and ends it perfectly.

Ps... I'm glad to see you here!

[Pebbles]

Thanks Ladies .... and Lily love must be enjoyed whilst it lasts I guess as it never seems to last forever very often x

[Lily Mae]

Very intense and raw write Pebbles. The things we do to bind ourselves in love and do for love.. and then its gone.. You did an excellent job penning these emotions well.. :) x

[Judy Ponceby]

Wow Pebbles. Deep and dark emotions. Vivid images here. Well done.