Pain

The more I look

The less I see

The more you look

The more I become

There's a sense of sadness

It renounces itself in you

Only to make a silent sound

So shrill in the feel

I wish I could take it

The pain you feel

It only begins to spread

As I jump conclusions

Have I lived as I were

Have I done something wrong

Is there a path I must take

Or perhaps one you must

The more I think

The less I know

The more you think

The more I incline

Author's Note

I'm visiting my family in Oregon and it's becoming more clear how much I don't know about the world. And how sadness runs in my family like a plague.

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

I would hope that you would look at yourself and your family through an objective eye before making any broad stroked conclusions about how sadness must run in your family. Being objective is the operative word here and is not always easy to do from within the test group. Being cheerful can sometimes spread as easy as the plague. I wish you and your family well.

[E G TEN]

Hey Limno, you write it as you see and feel it,
A bold statement, there are times such as this
And we cant do nothing about it" Time does heals
Almost everything,, cool write" thanks for the add! :-)

[dan]

Living with loved ones enveloped in sadness is a tough row to hoe. And I wish I could cheer you up about the world, but I'm old enough to be your grandfather and I STILL don't know a lot about the world. It's better just to focus on getting to know your own little corner of it and how to be a better person for having known this bit of info. The secret of life? No, life is no secret; just LIVE IT! take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the logic of your words.
"The more I think
The less I know
The more you think
The more I incline"
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[R Smith]

I guess families can be hard to deal with, you can't choose them like friends, you express you're frustration and sadness in this poem and i hope it works its self out, baring your soul here is a start, little steps as they say :)

[Maja]

This is actually a pretty damn accurate description of pain:

"Only to make a silent sound
So shrill in the feel"

I have never thought about describing it that way, but now that you have I realized it's spot-on. Cheers to you and your great writing. :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

pain is complex..........much like love.......and change is inevitable.
amazing poem......
i liked it!!!
:)

[sereenaoutloud]

I hope you and you family are able to move past this pain... brilliant write that made me think of the saying,
"We can't change other people but we can change ourselves and how we respond! "

[Wasekera S Chiphazi Ban..]

love the style of the poem really enjoyed reading it.. thanks for sharing

[Willard Wells]

Some people allow themselves to be in pain their entire life and don't have the ability to see their way out of the misery. The break in that family plague is recognizing it as you have and changing. People are a product of there environment and sometimes they don't know any difference until someone shows them the other side of life. Thank you for sharing some of your pain.