Breaking down.

More of my written word.

Where are you. Where did you go?

I need you more than ever, I can't feel you around anymore.

I used to feel your ghost tuck me in at night,

even when you were miles away,

your outline stayed with me.

Out of the corner of my eye I can see the past re running,

your watching telly or making dinner.

It makes it harder to forget.

At night as I lay there slowly falling into my semi permanent coma,

I think of you laying there next to me holding me.

I feel safe as if my heart is with yours once more,

but when I awake im hugging the empty space that was once yours.

I wonder if you can see how much im breaking,

how getting up in the morning with not even a slight trace,

that you were there.

That you even exist.

Im looking at your face again,

I didn't mean too I just auto piloted to your memory.

You don't look the same.

Does it matter who im with anymore,

does it matter what I do.

Does it matter if I live or die,

it doesn't matter if it's not you.

Author's Note

I would really love to hear peoples feedback, and to let me know if they have ever felt this way.

Reviews

[Shanna Bryant]

Girl yes! Yes! Yes! I love this piece. Goosebumps!!!!!

[Thomas Skahill]

Overall I like the poem and of course I've felt that way, I just feel like the first line could be dropped or changed somehow. To me it's the weakest point in the poem and a wise woman once said that to be a true jedi one must make their greatest weakness into their greatest strength. MIGHT apply here haha.

[Roger Turgeon]

There always seems to be that special one we never forget ... I think that's a good thing. Enjoyed

[Justin]

I have felt this way and I'm glad you wrote it because when I'm low I like reading these poems. I hate that someone else has to feel this way you know but it makes me feel like I'm not alone

[Pixieblue]

It's a horrible feeling, and it's really hard to describe to someone that has never felt it, its a pain that you cant just put a plaster on.

[Mike Wolfe]

Very good poem. The emotion was excellent and your passion is very obvious. You hit the nail on the head when it comes to grief. Very good job with this piece

[Pixieblue]

Thankyou very much. I just wrote the words that have been playing in my head for a while. I know it will end, but heartbreak is uncomfortably beautiful.

[Eddie M deadwolf]

Hello Pixieblue; this is a wonderful write my friend, your longin, you wantin an your needin, it has the blues an love written ALL Over it my friend... an dig that... Yes, have felt that way, for a long long time now, an still feel that way, for me it seems, Pain an love go hand an hand, they are a muse to me, no other way to sing an write heartbreak, blues an soulful crying, an wantin your love so true... :Eddie

[TheLoneWriter]

That was pretty intense. Another great piece, enjoyed reading it! I like how you didn't say a lot in the poem, but still I felt the story. Thanks for writing!

[ANM]

A lovely poem we'll written but sometimes you have to realise life goes on.... We only live once