Stalked By My Nightmares

Thank You For The Improvements Chad :].

Waking up screaming in the night.

Burned in my eyelids, terrible sights.

I wrestle the panic inside, try to fight.

This paranoid feeling that fills me with fright.

For everybody else the bad feeling goes away

When they wake up in the morning, to find a new day

But for me the claws of worry bury in my gut, here to stay

As I try to act semi-normal & keep my demons at bay.

 

Demons that chase me, laugh at me when I trip,

Trying to run away from bloody fangs that drip.

Blood from hundreds of other broken hearts that they rip,

“It’s all in my head” I choke back silent sobs & bite my lip.

 

Do you see them too? The monsters under my bed?
Do you see them too? The ghouls that dwell in my head?
Do you see them too? Walking around, the living dead?
Can you hear them whisper, do you know what they just said?

Reviews

[Chad]

This is quite a good poem. There are areas where word change should be considered. The ending three lines where you keep asking "do you see them?", that gets a little carried away, and I think with more thought you could pull off better lines. Remember, not every line of your poem must rhyme for it to be a good one. I still like the piece a lot though.

[Boogieman Alzalaus]

Ok The Only One I Will Comment. DUDE! That Was killer. XD Lol Very Dark Yet.. More My Style So Ima Think its More then Awesome! XD

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

Wow. Total koolness! LoL. I love it. And to answer the questions.. Yes. Yes I do. I see them often but I've learned to drown them out. Maybe that's why I get ticked off so much? Hmm. I wonder. LoL.
Great piece. Kudos, Lizz.