Oblivion

"oblivion is everything, but it is also nothing."

Falling and drowning yourself in the darkness of loss,
feeling the pieces of your heart breaking away and the light growing dimmer with each shattered piece,
As you watch a loved one die in your arms,
The plans for their life soiled by the intercate web of fate,
Hate is all you have for the world,
As the world spins from your perspective with an objective in mind,
You Intwine your soul with another in hopes to purge your pain but with no gain,
Your soul still troubled with somber spirits as the perplexity of the situation hits you,
Now lost in the darkness you once called home,
now nothing is left but you roam,
Still searching for a sliver of the broken heart that you left behind.

Author's Note

Tell me how you feel, feel free to leave a comment!, thank you for taking the time to read the writing.

Reviews

[Tom McRoberts]

Touching on something great, though it could do with some more sensory language. 'Darkness' and 'loss' would be expressed a lot stronger were they supplanted with some figurative language to really shake the reader's perceptions up a bit. Altogether though this is a solid write-up, keep it up!

[lonewolf225]

Thank you for the constructive review!! You continue to better my work :)

[flickering candle]

your words make me want to cry for you. your words are so vivid and potent with feeling. a great talent :)

[lonewolf225]

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you like the poem :)

[Daisygirl]

Wow, really powerful and descriptive. I loved the line "Now lost in the darkness you once called home,"

[lonewolf225]

thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

[WolfyZara]

I don't know what to say after reading this. I have something but i just don't know what it is call
I love it

[lonewolf225]

Thank you! I'm glad you like it! :)

[Freesearch 101]

Love it. Has a nice flow and deep perception. Very intriguing.
Great work

[lonewolf225]

Thank you for the review!