Life and Coffee

A sort of existential crisis I was having, and still am.

I made a cup of bitter coffee, because life tastes too sweet to me.

Yes, sweet is good but this is a kind of eerie sweet.

Life’s heavy like the humid air, and it weighs me down numb.

Heavy caffeine, I love the taste it leaves, so rich and dark mahogany.

Life’s not supposed to be easy and i’m in for a cruel awakening.

I’m a trapped animal that’s slowly breaking free of society

I take a sip to coat this lump at the back of my throat.

It’s just aching to get out, but I push it down.

Ugh, I produce the biggest sighs.

Life’s a prude b***h.

It’s no surprise that I don’t suffice.

She knows my tainted thoughts, how I’ve been raised on lies.

She knows how I can’t connect to the truth inside.

I’ll take it as bitter as it comes please.

No cream.

No sugarcoating.

Give it to me straight, dark,and black like tar filled lungs and heart attacks.

As bitter and vulgar as the truth may be, it warms me inside more than anything.

Reviews

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Well done extended metaphor, using coffee as a standin for the concept of life. Clever wording

[Lookwithinsight]

Thank you thank you thank you

[jjwilbourne]

Live is indeed a prude b***h. I really like this poem.

[Lookwithinsight]

It is isn't it? (:

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

I love too, I could almost be envious in this deeply talented writer's blood you wear. There must be some way about it with everything because it makes one feel so good reading it, so you have a way with this bitter coffee like truth, it's lame but there's no need for Pepsi or cream here, you have me convinced that the world is as you see it even though you admit it is not the world you see that you have been raised by a pack of cards or wolves, or lies, yeah...though it sounds more exciting to think of you as raised by a pack of wolves, even cards which is also possible, but I have a glorified image of it too many miles away from this hemisphere

[Lookwithinsight]

woo! This comment made my day. I'm glad you get the poem.

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

thanks, lookwithinsight

[Lizzie Mitchell]

I love the creativity, poetic diction, and emotion.
I love how the syntax is a poetic sort of stream of consciousness.
To me the focus seemed just elusive enough to not fully portray a specific theme.
The entire piece gave me an idea of what you're talking about, but not the whole story.
But maybe that's how you were feeling?
Which is evidenced by the line "Life’s not supposed to be easy and i’m in for a cruel awakening."
When you wrote this did you feel like there's a large piece missing from your understanding of life?

[Lookwithinsight]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I didn't have a general theme, it was just thoughts. It really is about me just enjoying my last summer before college.

[Lizzie Mitchell]

Oh wow! Re-reading it with that in mind brings a whole new meaning to it. I can relate and I appreciateit even more now.

[Violet Ray]

I love the comparison. I can understand where you are coming from.

[Lookwithinsight]

thank you :]

[Olivia Nolte]

Love this. You are deeply talented! :)

[Lookwithinsight]

Thank you!

[A. Amos]

In 18 if you can write like this...I'm sure the world would love to read your work more and more. This was amazing!

[Lookwithinsight]

Wow! Thank you! It means a lot

[Bella]

Awesome poem, I really like it. Good job.

[Lookwithinsight]

Eek!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!