disloyal

Sad love story

Better the skies stay dark
Lest the the truth shine
In the cold light of day
The truth is sharp and stark
My sins
Will slash our sweet love away

Reviews

[Caroline B A Maguire]

Ooh!I'm intrigued 🤔 is it her sins or yours which slashed the love away ?? I read further down your girlfriend of 16 years left whilst you were in hospital..a bitter pill to swallow..(no pun intended) .u had a lucky escape my friend! Keep on keeping on..love your work..Caroline 🙂

[Orphic dreamer]

“Better the skies stay dark
Lest the the truth shine
In the cold light of day”
The treacherous sense of imagery in these lines is uncanny! Within such few words, you were able to recite insurmountable emotions of grief. Wonderful!

[LostSage]

this poem is kinda backward. I was in the hospital for a few months. in that time my girlfriend ran off and married some other guy. Ouch! have a sweet day

[Orphic dreamer]

The amount of will power you have to continue the journey of life and share the wisdom you learned by writing beautifuly poems is truly remarkable! Keep going, soldier!

[LostSage]

the journey of life... sometimes I get really scared... I try very hard not let it show. thank you for your kind words. have a sweet day

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting and pertinent last two lines that are indicative of how many of us feel...

the truth is supposed to set us free....but sometimes that gets taken to literal heights, or lows.

j.

[Lourdes Pessetto]

The truth always sets us free! Sometimes we feel defeated when others reject us or betrayedl us, but honestly, the act of betrayal only speaks about the person who did, not who they did it to.

Thank you for sharing!
Regards!

[LostSage]

Wow! good stuff! You seem wise! Thank you! have a sweet day

[Lourdes Pessetto]

You're very welcome! Thank you!

[Chris Shaw]

Disloyalty, infidelity and its ilk can be treacherous. One sure way to shred a relationship to bits. Painful.

Chris

[LostSage]

This poem is not my sins
while I was in the hospital
my girlfriend of 16 years
married some other guy
talk about pain!

[Chris Shaw]

Sorry to hear that. The painful bit still applies though :(

[John the Baptist]

A brief piece here, one that seemingly alludes to an act, or acts, of unfaithfulness. We all know the value of truth, but sometimes it is best left unspoken.

[LostSage]

This piece is actually opposite of what people might think. it wasn't my sins. I went into the hospital for 8 months. in that time my sweetheart girlfriend of 16 years ran off and married some other guy. that's why my poems sound so sad. please stay in touch with me. I need all the friends I can get

[LostSage]

This love stuff starts out all happy and jumping up and down then turns sour. In my case it went from sour to poisonous. I hear you. Keep writing

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

There is a sorrowful darkness of pained regret in this piece of writing that says so much in few words. Thank you for sharing your art with us.

[LostSage]

This love stuff starts off happy then turns sour then to poison ouch Thanks