Thoughtless violence

My thoughts were stars scattered through out a galaxy. My heart beat hard. Then i heard the gun shot. Violent misunderstanding. Wanting to fade into oblivion. That get away car. And then it was done.

My thoughts were stars scattered
Through a galaxy
My heart beat
Hard
I wasn't trusting anybody
My hand crept towards
But yours jerked away
Then I saw him
Blind anger
Quick steps
Shiny metal
He smirked
At me
I tried to scream
My mind was confused
You were thoughtless
Emotionless
Heard the shot
And went
Down
No one came their he lay
I cried stupid tears
As the b*****d got away
Fumbled for my phone
Called 911
So sad so angry
But not suprised
Violence is all he's ever known
And all he ever we'll
Thoughtless

Author's Note

Please ignore grammatical errors my schooling is limited.
Tell me what you think I know it's not a masterpiece but is it as bad as I think?