i'll be yours

a love poem to start this holiday weekend

artwork by talantbek chekirov

i’ll hum you a song of red roses

when you’ve forgotten the song they sing

when silence invades your days

the velvet soft notes of each petal

will lead you to my whispered borders of love

 

i’ll hand you stars from the velvet sky

when darkness threatens

their gentle celestial illumination

will be your glimmer of sanguinity

 

i’ll be as comfortable as your worn out jeans

as formal as your tuxedo

and the symphonic reflections in the mirror of your mind

 

i’ll be the kiss you long for in the middle of the day

and the middle of the night

i’ll sweep the dust of your burdens into the great abyss

 

i’ll be yours

 

Reviews

[Lavi]

I like this writing a lot although I am curious as to the purpose of the = signs replacing the 's in your writing.
Favorite lines:
"i=ll be the kiss you long for in the middle of the day
and the middle of the night
i=ll sweep the dust of your burdens into the great abyss"
&
"i=ll hand you stars from the velvet sky
when darkness threatens
their gentle celestial illumination
will be your glimmer of sanguinity"

I've never seen a writing quite like this before and I enjoyed every word of it. Even with the peculiar placing of the equal signs. Surprisingly it doesn't break the flow of the poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Seriously, I do not see the = that people are referring to....sorry. I will have to look at someone else's computer to check this out. I appreciate the visit. Lydi*

[Healing Star]

I don't See the i= either must be somethin' dicked up on her computer

[Lydia Shutter]

A lot of people saw it, but it was a glitch on the site.

[Healing Star]

oh ....... :)

[Lavi]

Ah, I've seen that once of twice. I never would've guessed it though - thanks for letting us know.

[Trace]

I love this. what a wonderful way of saying: I'll be yours.
made me smile.

Trace

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Trace. We were away. Sorry the thanks took so long. Lydi**

[Healing Star]

well, I only like this part.

i’ll hum you a song of red roses

when you’ve forgotten the song they sing

when silence invades your days

the velvet soft notes of each petal

will lead you to my whispered borders of love



i’ll hand you stars from the velvet sky

when darkness threatens

their gentle celestial illumination

will be your glimmer of sanguinity



i’ll be as comfortable as your worn out jeans

as formal as your tuxedo

and the symphonic reflections in the mirror of your mind



i’ll be the kiss you long for in the middle of the day

and the middle of the night

i’ll sweep the dust of your burdens into the great abyss



i’ll be yours


Very lovely, I find myself wishing the Love of my Life could read this and keep her mind in it, and through it all, not have anything in her mind saying like, yah right. Every man would love to read this as the the thoughts of the Woman they love. wonderful imagery and mystery - it captivated me and kept me in the Moment - not many reads can do that for me - I'm so easily distracted ... what was I saying LOL thank you for sharing- I trust you have an Amazing wonderful being that you lie down next too nearly every night, let him know ... someone is jealous of him.

[Lydia Shutter]

Yes, my hubby and I have been married almost 43 years. Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Lydi**

[Healing Star]

MOST HONORED TO HAVE MADE YOUR ACQUAINTANCE MY DEAR.

[Sami Khalil]

Your poems of romance leave us desire more, lead to more sanguine feelings and above all a shimmer and glimmer of art. Love it.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, my friend. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Ted Kniffen]

Lydi;
This is brilliant. A true paean to love. I do get the sense that this deals with someone who may be slipping away, as though they were being lost to dementia.
Just that feeling of...I'll be there no matter what...do not worry.
A very good write.

[Lydia Shutter]

No, actually about someone who did slip away...pass...in April. As long as you thought of something while reading my words, it makes me happy. Thank you, Ted. I appreciate the time you take to read me. Lydi**

[B]

So utterly romantic
I love every line
and for some reason everything i read today is about roses
the eternal symbol of beauty and love

Thank you for writting this

[Lydia Shutter]

I appreciate your review. Thank you. Lydi**

[barleygirl]

I love the more simple straightforward approach you're using here, but still full of sparkling imagery as always. I love the inviting tone, as everyone longs to be persuaded. Let the other person stick his/her head out, vulnerable to rejection, but trusting that this will turn out beautifully. BEING WANTED is the ultimate seduction, which you've carried across in a palpable way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lydia Shutter]

It is said, "Men desire women and women desire that desire." This is true. Sorry it took me so long to thank you, Margie. We were in Europe. I appreciate your reviews....always. Lydi**

[aspen]

this is truly beautiful, amazing work. i love your word selection and how you use them

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Allison. Lydi**

[Alfred Kukitz]

oh...oh.....the beauty of words, of metaphors simply singing the way of the eternal.

regards,
al

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Al. Enjoy your weekend. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

There is a time when we must embrace the
wisdom of change when reality is but a passing
melody of days gone by... loving to the end of
eternity. To be there. truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Pat. You are a special lady. Lydi**

[Neville]

I love it Lydi** absolutely super and FAB, you have such a knack when it comes to these....

Oh' I first visited 'I'll be yours' a couple of days back and believe me, there were = signs all over the page...am so glad that glitch has now been sorted.....N

[Lydia Shutter]

Hi Neville, I never did see the equal signs,but I am glad they disappeared for everyone now. Thank you for the review, my friend. LydI**

[Neville]

Pleasure....