i'll be yours

a love poem to start this holiday weekend

artwork by talantbek chekirov

i’ll hum you a song of red roses

when you’ve forgotten the song they sing

when silence invades your days

the velvet soft notes of each petal

will lead you to my whispered borders of love

 

i’ll hand you stars from the velvet sky

when darkness threatens

their gentle celestial illumination

will be your glimmer of sanguinity

 

i’ll be as comfortable as your worn out jeans

as formal as your tuxedo

and the symphonic reflections in the mirror of your mind

 

i’ll be the kiss you long for in the middle of the day

and the middle of the night

i’ll sweep the dust of your burdens into the great abyss

 

i’ll be yours

 

Reviews

[Lavi]

I like this writing a lot although I am curious as to the purpose of the = signs replacing the 's in your writing.
Favorite lines:
"i=ll be the kiss you long for in the middle of the day
and the middle of the night
i=ll sweep the dust of your burdens into the great abyss"
&
"i=ll hand you stars from the velvet sky
when darkness threatens
their gentle celestial illumination
will be your glimmer of sanguinity"

I've never seen a writing quite like this before and I enjoyed every word of it. Even with the peculiar placing of the equal signs. Surprisingly it doesn't break the flow of the poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Seriously, I do not see the = that people are referring to....sorry. I will have to look at someone else's computer to check this out. I appreciate the visit. Lydi*

[Healing Star]

I don't See the i= either must be somethin' dicked up on her computer

[Lydia Shutter]

A lot of people saw it, but it was a glitch on the site.

[Healing Star]

oh ....... :)

[Lavi]

Ah, I've seen that once of twice. I never would've guessed it though - thanks for letting us know.

[zunie frost]

This poem gives so much emotion, love and It's produce this feeling of about being loved by someone and it feels special.

[Lydia Shutter]

Zunie, thank you so much for the visit. Lydi**

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Wonderful- 🌹 and all the rest is left up to the imagination...

[Lydia Shutter]

Like it used to be in the black and white movies! :) Thanks for the visit. Lydi**

[Chris]

Sensuous and endearing - a good pair

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Chris. Lydi**

[Govind singh]

Lydia u never fail to amaze me...such a sweet and lovely poem..loved it..I'll be the kiss u long for the middle of the day and middle of the night..loved it..

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Govind. Lydi**

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Whispers of amour poetically flowing from your pen; encapsulated lovingly in great style! A wonderful write … :-)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Phill. Lydi**

[Ardra]

Such a pleasure to read you Lydi...
Always beautiful...sensual...and such words ...if ever written to someone...for sure that person is gone for life hehhe... :)

[Lydia Shutter]

They are written for someone....and he knows how I feel! :) thank you so much, Galadriel. Lydi**

[Ardra]

Hehehhe oh isn't that such lovely feeling.... :)
Love all of your poems....

[emmajoy]

' .. their gentle celestial illumination ~ will be your glimmer of sanguinity .. '

Complete and utter love divine.. passion in every stanza.. in fact in every phrase. You, dear Lydi , raise the bar higher and higher when it comes to blissful beginnings, in between and of course.. the finishing of gorgeousness!

[Lydia Shutter]

"Gorgeousness"....love that word! :) Thank you so much, Emma. Have a lovely day. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

I love playing with wordification! (You) x

[Lydia Shutter]

Laughing here....and you do it so well!

[emmajoy]

Don't get me going else i might suffer from a touch of toomucharrogansitis. xx

[Lydia Shutter]

Just choked on my coffee! LOLOLOL

[emmajoy]

oops, so sorry.. won't say another word.. (You)

[Paul Bell]

Like your idea of starting the weekend.
Alluring and sensual.
Does it get any better than that?

[Lydia Shutter]

Nope! :) I used to write "Friday night writes" that were sensual and/or romantic. Got out of the habit, but I should start again. Thanks, Paul. I appreciate the visit. Lydi**

[Paul Bell]

Nothing better than a bit of romance.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely love the third stanza similes..."comfortable as your old worn jeans"---"formal as your tuxedo"
those work so well to make the feeling in this poem a comfortably numb feeling of contentment.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

So glad you enjoyed, Jacob. Thank you very much for the review. Lydi**

[Kelly Scheppers]

Who wouldn't welcome a love poem for any weekend? You've certainly captured the ambiance of the artwork, which in itself is something that poets like you and I are quite fanatic about. Gorgeous lines throughout are truly the signature of your style!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Kelly...your reviews mean a lot to me. Lydi**