PLAY FOR ME

 

I close my eyes
to absorb your whispers
that massage me gently
like a new found lyric
over, and over again
I take you inside
and out

of me
like a new way of breathing
you give me a life worthy of being
I am filled with riches
having no wants
because your love on me
anticipates my needs
silently. I wait to hear
you not only play
your music for me
but bestow your
presence in me
wrapping my soul
in a permanent
afterglow.

Reviews

[kollaboratyve]

Oh my my my!!!!!!!!! this is so good it really is tasteful. It put me in a daze for a minute. I did not know what emotion I was feeling. I tried to resist the lure, but as I read, I got hooked. This is really lovely. If you do not mind, I would like to highly consider featuring this on the Poets Consortium. I would love to examine this with the imput of the other members. This is really nice and graceful. You pulled out the heavy artillery on this one! Great piece,lovely!!!!

[Last Lying Look]

wow.... wow..
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THIS WAS SO AMAZING!!!!!!!!
I loved every single part of it.
Especially:
"I close my eyes
to absorb your whispers
that massage me gently
like a new found lyric
over, and over again"
That part was really neat.
Your such an amazing writer and I can't wait to read more of your writing :)

-Elissa

[C.J.]

nice poem i like the last line it just ends the poem perfictly.

[Gordon]

I like it... again you tread on the God / earthly lover road. You do it so smoothly. To me the strongest line is as follows, although I have one suggestion for it;

I take you inside
and out
of me (errotic tone, depending on the reader's perception. There is another way to interpret this)
like a new way of breathing (really love this line, it's my favorite, "a new way of breathing")
you give me a life worth seeing (but here I would think "you give me a life worth inhaling" works better)
I am filled with riches
having no wants
because your love on me
anticipates my needs
silently.

Good Job!
The suggestion I gave really just feeds off the strong line before it. A life worth seeing just seems out of place based on the previous line and the line after. Just my 2 cents worth.

[Dionysus Cain]

that right there is love in the form of words..... nice, i see the comfort in your words, wrapping my soul, all right,,,

[☮]

"In a permanent afterglow."

What a way to conclude this piece and how true this statement is. It's the passion that leaves its permanent effects afterward that fulfills us. Very nice way to put it.

[Lady V]

I love the relationship you chose to display. Music always puts me in a trance with its melody and soothing tone. Most times we can close our eyes and have the song meant just for that moment in our life. You never let me down the way you write. I applaud your talent and I look forward to reading so much more.

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[~IlOvEcHrIsToPhErBuRnEt..]

i like this, it has alot of descriptive words in it and i like that

[Ravenskald]

On no not again ! ;)
You continue to write beautifully, elegantly with warmth and affection.
Emotionally Honest, warm and encompassing, Reminds me of the glow you get when playing "Stoned Love "
by the Supremes, this is "unstoned" Love without the pop . . . .
Truly wonderful stuff, open and accesible your voice is so clear I can almost hear you in the room.
Encore !

~Raven

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

"Having no wants because your love on me anticipates my needs silently"
I think you're simply an amazing writer and your pen never ceases to amaze me, Bravo!

-Marv

[Anima Inspired]

This was very sensual, in a charming, disarming and tasteful way. I love the idea of love and passion being likened to music, as I feel that music is one of those things that can evoke feelings akin to passion and true desire. A very nice write!