My Fir$t Love

Collaboration from CYNTAX & LYRICAL LOVE

The root of all evil is so necessary,
January's rent gets us all through February.
We're all faith-based but currency's priority,
If I shouldn't worship dollars, then God, why torture me?

 

For everything...there is a particular price.
Like my Son-Can you pay with your life?
While in preparation for the next step.
Hold the rope... watch the risers-look down, upon your brother's neck.
 
Do we really make sacrifices?
Either 401ks or contributing to life's vices.
Hypocrites with fat pockets or prayers for wealth,
Is it God or co-payments that give us health?

 

Currency by weight was the testament of old,
Asses, land, and oils replaced with silver and gold.
Digging in the grasses, you'll always find false prophecy
Mailing 200.00 weekly, with hopes of a new democracy.
 
In the end, we worship what doesn't even exist,
Just numbers on a screen or green papers in a tight fist.

What's cash without "the man" telling us our worth?

What's life without the Lord getting us through birth?

 

Stand strong and place monetary value where it is due,
Listening to what's above... Not that distorted view.
Short-changed and cheated, an economy failed...
The real Power from God is NOT for sale.

Reviews

[darkgurl]

This is very intense, what a wonderful write

"Currency by weight was the testament of old,
Asses, land, and oils replaced with silver and gold.
Digging in the grasses, you'll always find false prophecy
Mailing 200.00 weekly, with hopes of a new democracy."

I just loved this stanza right here, very well written you two...Kim

[Ocean Orchid]

Very intense touch of reality... well written

[Natasha Ashway]

In the end, we worship what doesn't even exist,
Just numbers on a screen or green papers in a tight fist...

Food for thought and a great read.

Thanks for sharing!

[Dani California]

Ha!! Outstanding!

love it love it love it.

"Currency by weight was the testament of old,
Asses, land, and oils replaced with silver and gold.
Digging in the grasses, you'll always find false prophecy
Mailing 200.00 weekly, with hopes of a new democracy"

Sadly, our souls have been given a monetary value by mankind.
We are judged by others based upon how much we are worth
in dollars... that don't really exist.

This is an awesome write! And you two write quite well together..

Great job both of you ! :)

[~amanda~]

i think its a cliche when people say something is a metaphor for the human condition. however i think that is just what you have written, and not cliched at all. very intriguing, fun to read, and think about. thanks for sharing!

[C.J.]

wow nice poem i wish they just traded agin and took away dame money it always gets in the way and just kills people good write and good thinking.

[Nassira Merahi]

Very deep and meaningful ... An analyzation of the human situation in a period of worlwide crisis. Human principles have shifted from spirituality to capitalism and its insanity...
You are sending a powerful message there :) Very synchronized collaboration here!

Salam to you guyz :)

[THE LOST ROSE]

I agree this is intense. This is a message for all to hear. So many get caught up in that rat race even though we claim we are faithful to GOD. This line "Hold the rope... watch the risers-look down, upon your brother's neck". Sent chills down my spine. this line made me want to shout "Short-changed and cheated, an economy failed...The real Power from God is NOT for sale". Great write you two. I hope you pair up again and allow your readers to travel the journey with you guys.

[kollaboratyve]

After I read it with a clear mind, I come to the conclusion that this poem is not a poem in the sense of poetry. This should be the intro to the book you will be writing. It is to royal to be relegate to that of a poem, eventhough your poems are all good. Also, that being said, this is the kind of poetry that should be read durning the next pesidential inauguration,simply because it speaks to our situation ,now. Your potential is illustrious and profound. Your dept of vision and insight is in the league with the best in the business. I think you missed your calling. You should have been a professional poet. I'm amazed that you only write when you get the chance,nevertheless, this is a good work. It is solid to the core!

[☮]

Nice work, ya'll :)

[Wicahpi]

"Stand strong and place monetary value where it is due,
Listening to what's above... Not that distorted view.
Short-changed and cheated, an economy failed...
The real Power from God is NOT for sale." ~ that says it all!